Championship Match: Godcomplex (3-2) vs. Razah (4-1)-- GODCOMPLEX WINS, 4-0

PancakeBrah · 08-28-2015, 06:21 PM

Razah -

I, personally, think that line five was better than six. But who am I to disagree with the author?

GodComplex -

This was pretty funny. Picturing Barney as a nihilist and softly suggesting he could fuck a kid as a last hurrah. The vocabulary of the kids themselves brought me out of the piece a bit. A bit too advanced, didn't really capture that voice well. If you had I think the dichotomy of the questions vs. replies would've been even funnier. But this was solid, and good in some sections. A nice misdirection kind of verse. I enjoyed reading it.

V/ GC

08-28-2015, 06:21 PM	#12
PancakeBrah SOBER Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 12,480 Battle Record: 2-5 Champed - AOWL Season 2 Rep Power: 85899407	Razah - I, personally, think that line five was better than six. But who am I to disagree with the author? GodComplex - This was pretty funny. Picturing Barney as a nihilist and softly suggesting he could fuck a kid as a last hurrah. The vocabulary of the kids themselves brought me out of the piece a bit. A bit too advanced, didn't really capture that voice well. If you had I think the dichotomy of the questions vs. replies would've been even funnier. But this was solid, and good in some sections. A nice misdirection kind of verse. I enjoyed reading it. V/ GC __________________ Netcees 2025 Revivalist Movement Founder