Knucklehead 4-4 vs Odd Ways 1-1 {Odd Ways wins by No Show}

Hush · 07-13-2015, 01:03 PM

Netcees Battle League Season VIII

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Due Dates:

Verses are due Thursday, July 16th 2015 11:59 PM PST. and will be open until the following Sunday
Battles that lack votes may close later.
One sided battles may get closed early.
Extensions are 24 hours

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Minimum of 12, maximum of 18
If not agreed upon, second drop must match length of the first

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First to 5, win by at least two votes

@Knucklehead 4-4 vs @Odd Ways 1-1

Bash · 07-13-2015, 02:41 PM

12 is cool

Bash · 07-14-2015, 09:25 AM

- Pray for the Departed

BROOO I talked ya batch out the draws easy. Trust me, the box is mine
Cuz when I Conor out the pussy... We'll put on a show bigger than UFC 189
Went from top dawg to a shaky season. BITCH, ur a soft touch n I mean it
Bro I'll put a dent in ur stomach so deep, the shit could mirror a temper pedic
LOL @ those childish rants. If I get the signal... Yeah I'll end this hoe
Cuz it won't take a Milonakis head off n dead em quicker than the show
When u choke, u choke HARD. Trust u won't see HOF @ all slime
The way these vets keep u on the ropes... U'd think it was a setup for a 6-1-9
As far as the crew shit goes, even ya comrades know u can't win
This nigga so bitch made... If he joined suicide squad, his alias would be Harley Quinn
Don't be brash. If u throw the gloves on, it's LIGHTS OUT so call it quits
Cuz ill punch u One Time n leave ya corpse in clear water on some Keith Thurman shit

@Knucklehead

Chyeahhh!!! · 07-18-2015, 10:31 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Odd Ways

- Pray for the Departed

BROOO I talked ya batch out the draws easy. Trust me, the box is mine
Cuz when I Conor out the pussy... We'll put on a show bigger than UFC 189

this was cool, love the way you came in here during the setup, comedy was sure to follow

Went from top dawg to a shaky season. BITCH, ur a soft touch n I mean it
Bro I'll put a dent in ur stomach so deep, the shit could mirror a temper pedic

good visual here, was missing something cant' say what in the execution to compliment the imagery, dunno

LOL @ those childish rants. If I get the signal... Yeah I'll end this hoe
Cuz it won't take a Milonakis head off n dead em quicker than the show

hell no, flowed great but Knuck/Nakis? hell no lol

When u choke, u choke HARD. Trust u won't see HOF @ all slime
The way these vets keep u on the ropes... U'd think it was a setup for a 6-1-9

cool here, nothing great but coo

As far as the crew shit goes, even ya comrades know u can't win
This nigga so bitch made... If he joined suicide squad, his alias would be Harley Quinn

ok

Don't be brash. If u throw the gloves on, it's LIGHTS OUT so call it quits
Cuz ill punch u One Time n leave ya corpse in clear water on some Keith Thurman shit

ok closer

@Knucklehead

you had good cadence, humoring setups, coupled with some effective follow throughs mixed with personals. Nice verse

Unfukwitable · 07-18-2015, 12:50 PM

BROOO I talked ya batch out the draws easy. Trust me, the box is mine
Cuz when I Conor out the pussy... We'll put on a show bigger than UFC 189
- fucks with this right here.

Went from top dawg to a shaky season. BITCH, ur a soft touch n I mean it
Bro I'll put a dent in ur stomach so deep, the shit could mirror a temper pedic
- lmfao nice Idea couldve been alil better tho, concept was mean tho.

LOL @ those childish rants. If I get the signal... Yeah I'll end this hoe
Cuz it won't take a Milonakis head off n dead em quicker than the show
- ehh i heard doper milonakis lines tbh

When u choke, u choke HARD. Trust u won't see HOF @ all slime
The way these vets keep u on the ropes... U'd think it was a setup for a 6-1-9
- lmfao nice u couldve made it ode dope'r.

As far as the crew shit goes, even ya comrades know u can't win
This nigga so bitch made... If he joined suicide squad, his alias would be Harley Quinn
- ehh wasn't hittin to me.

Don't be brash. If u throw the gloves on, it's LIGHTS OUT so call it quits
Cuz ill punch u One Time n leave ya corpse in clear water on some Keith Thurman shit
- alright

I feelt u couldve scrapped the Harley Quinn bar and the Andy Mil line and replaced it with material as strong as ya opener, Overall good verse but What im learning now is u gotta chop heads in battles no more haymakers only decapitation lol .... we gon run a muk via Tag team

O. Lineman · 07-18-2015, 11:41 PM

I'm sucker for a good wrestling line 619 was that fire. Keep writing.

fraze · 07-19-2015, 08:53 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Odd Ways

BROOO I talked ya batch out the draws easy. Trust me, the box is mine
Cuz when I Conor out the pussy... We'll put on a show bigger than UFC 189
this is aight
Went from top dawg to a shaky season. BITCH, ur a soft touch n I mean it
Bro I'll put a dent in ur stomach so deep, the shit could mirror a temper pedic
cool. nice imagery bar
LOL @ those childish rants. If I get the signal... Yeah I'll end this hoe
Cuz it won't take a Milonakis head off n dead em quicker than the show
didn't like this. forced.
When u choke, u choke HARD. Trust u won't see HOF @ all slime
The way these vets keep u on the ropes... U'd think it was a setup for a 6-1-9
cool, but this seems a little dated
As far as the crew shit goes, even ya comrades know u can't win
This nigga so bitch made... If he joined suicide squad, his alias would be Harley Quinn
too obvious
Don't be brash. If u throw the gloves on, it's LIGHTS OUT so call it quits
Cuz ill punch u One Time n leave ya corpse in clear water on some Keith Thurman shit
not feeling this

Cool verse. There were a few misses but none of them were too bad. Decent read. Props.

Hush · 07-19-2015, 12:14 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Odd Ways

- Pray for the Departed

BROOO I talked ya batch out the draws easy. Trust me, the box is mine
Cuz when I Conor out the pussy... We'll put on a show bigger than UFC 189
ok cool wp. on ur allen knight shit lol
Went from top dawg to a shaky season. BITCH, ur a soft touch n I mean it
Bro I'll put a dent in ur stomach so deep, the shit could mirror a temper pedic
ok cool, ight but wording was coo
LOL @ those childish rants. If I get the signal... Yeah I'll end this hoe
Cuz it won't take a Milonakis head off n dead em quicker than the show
damn fire ass wp, i nevr seen that, could of been SO much sicker cuz andy battle raps, u could of had lotw
When u choke, u choke HARD. Trust u won't see HOF @ all slime
The way these vets keep u on the ropes... U'd think it was a setup for a 6-1-9
damnnn DON DEMARCO. THIS NIGGA NICE
As far as the crew shit goes, even ya comrades know u can't win
This nigga so bitch made... If he joined suicide squad, his alias would be Harley Quinn
lmao fire
Don't be brash. If u throw the gloves on, it's LIGHTS OUT so call it quits
Cuz ill punch u One Time n leave ya corpse in clear water on some Keith Thurman shit
ok
@Knucklehead

damn
u did that

Kill Spree · 07-19-2015, 02:34 PM

dope shit odd, my comp keep freezing when i break down some feed so ima keep it short or im pucnhing this thing in the face. opener was dope, andy mill show was fire. your droppin heat for being back for two weeks son. keep at it

Strikta · 07-19-2015, 06:58 PM

BROOO I talked ya batch out the draws easy. Trust me, the box is mine
Cuz when I Conor out the pussy... We'll put on a show bigger than UFC 189
I liked this lol
Went from top dawg to a shaky season. BITCH, ur a soft touch n I mean it
Bro I'll put a dent in ur stomach so deep, the shit could mirror a temper pedic
Ok
LOL @ those childish rants. If I get the signal... Yeah I'll end this hoe
Cuz it won't take a Milonakis head off n dead em quicker than the show
Ehhh a lil forced, but I still kinda liked it
When u choke, u choke HARD. Trust u won't see HOF @ all slime
The way these vets keep u on the ropes... U'd think it was a setup for a 6-1-9
Nice
As far as the crew shit goes, even ya comrades know u can't win
This nigga so bitch made... If he joined suicide squad, his alias would be Harley Quin
Ha
Don't be brash. If u throw the gloves on, it's LIGHTS OUT so call it quits
Cuz ill punch u One Time n leave ya corpse in clear water on some Keith Thurman shit
Ok close

All in all this verse was pretty cool imo.. I haven't really peeped much from u, but u got skills dude. U have decent structure & it makes for a nice easy read.. along w/ some cool ideas & concepts that I enjoyed thruout. Nothing in this verse was really that bad.. the only thing I think u coulda maybe done w/out was the temperpedic bar.. other than that, it was a solid verse bro.

I enjoyed.

Keep at it bro.

Pz.

07-13-2015, 01:03 PM	#1
Hush NJ Devil Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 12,036 Battle Record: Who Cares Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Rep Power: 84181420	Knucklehead 4-4 vs Odd Ways 1-1 {Odd Ways wins by No Show} Netcees Battle League Season VIII Rules Due Dates: Verses are due Thursday, July 16th 2015 11:59 PM PST. and will be open until the following Sunday Battles that lack votes may close later. One sided battles may get closed early. Extensions are 24 hours Line Limit: Minimum of 12, maximum of 18 If not agreed upon, second drop must match length of the first For additional Rules refer to rule thread First to 5, win by at least two votes @Knucklehead 4-4 vs @Odd Ways 1-1 __________________ Bed stuy fly Bushwick sick East ny walk

07-18-2015, 12:50 PM	#5
Unfukwitable baz∞ka Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 1,643 Battle Record: 38-35 Champed - Fight Night 7 - Battle Arena Tournament - 1-2 Punch League Rep Power: 36460388	BROOO I talked ya batch out the draws easy. Trust me, the box is mine Cuz when I Conor out the pussy... We'll put on a show bigger than UFC 189 - fucks with this right here. Went from top dawg to a shaky season. BITCH, ur a soft touch n I mean it Bro I'll put a dent in ur stomach so deep, the shit could mirror a temper pedic - lmfao nice Idea couldve been alil better tho, concept was mean tho. LOL @ those childish rants. If I get the signal... Yeah I'll end this hoe Cuz it won't take a Milonakis head off n dead em quicker than the show - ehh i heard doper milonakis lines tbh When u choke, u choke HARD. Trust u won't see HOF @ all slime The way these vets keep u on the ropes... U'd think it was a setup for a 6-1-9 - lmfao nice u couldve made it ode dope'r. As far as the crew shit goes, even ya comrades know u can't win This nigga so bitch made... If he joined suicide squad, his alias would be Harley Quinn - ehh wasn't hittin to me. Don't be brash. If u throw the gloves on, it's LIGHTS OUT so call it quits Cuz ill punch u One Time n leave ya corpse in clear water on some Keith Thurman shit - alright I feelt u couldve scrapped the Harley Quinn bar and the Andy Mil line and replaced it with material as strong as ya opener, Overall good verse but What im learning now is u gotta chop heads in battles no more haymakers only decapitation lol .... we gon run a muk via Tag team __________________ WICKeD

07-13-2015, 02:41 PM	#2
Bash Barrin' Out Join Date: Nov 2014 Posts: 577 Battle Record: 16-15 Champed - Fight Night 5 Rep Power: 13649171	12 is cool

07-14-2015, 09:25 AM	#3
Bash Barrin' Out Join Date: Nov 2014 Posts: 577 Battle Record: 16-15 Champed - Fight Night 5 Rep Power: 13649171	- Pray for the Departed BROOO I talked ya batch out the draws easy. Trust me, the box is mine Cuz when I Conor out the pussy... We'll put on a show bigger than UFC 189 Went from top dawg to a shaky season. BITCH, ur a soft touch n I mean it Bro I'll put a dent in ur stomach so deep, the shit could mirror a temper pedic LOL @ those childish rants. If I get the signal... Yeah I'll end this hoe Cuz it won't take a Milonakis head off n dead em quicker than the show When u choke, u choke HARD. Trust u won't see HOF @ all slime The way these vets keep u on the ropes... U'd think it was a setup for a 6-1-9 As far as the crew shit goes, even ya comrades know u can't win This nigga so bitch made... If he joined suicide squad, his alias would be Harley Quinn Don't be brash. If u throw the gloves on, it's LIGHTS OUT so call it quits Cuz ill punch u One Time n leave ya corpse in clear water on some Keith Thurman shit @Knucklehead

07-18-2015, 11:41 PM	#6
O. Lineman 40 Cal. Ripken Join Date: Oct 2014 Posts: 84 Battle Record: 1-2 Rep Power: 6370618	I'm sucker for a good wrestling line 619 was that fire. Keep writing.

07-19-2015, 02:34 PM	#9
Kill Spree Senior Member Join Date: Feb 2014 Posts: 4,460 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 37645698	dope shit odd, my comp keep freezing when i break down some feed so ima keep it short or im pucnhing this thing in the face. opener was dope, andy mill show was fire. your droppin heat for being back for two weeks son. keep at it

07-19-2015, 06:58 PM	#10
Strikta 39 NS, lost in votes once Join Date: Oct 2001 Posts: 11,242 Battle Record: 32-40 Champed - Time to Kill X - Write Week III Rep Power: 84181452	BROOO I talked ya batch out the draws easy. Trust me, the box is mine Cuz when I Conor out the pussy... We'll put on a show bigger than UFC 189 I liked this lol Went from top dawg to a shaky season. BITCH, ur a soft touch n I mean it Bro I'll put a dent in ur stomach so deep, the shit could mirror a temper pedic Ok LOL @ those childish rants. If I get the signal... Yeah I'll end this hoe Cuz it won't take a Milonakis head off n dead em quicker than the show Ehhh a lil forced, but I still kinda liked it When u choke, u choke HARD. Trust u won't see HOF @ all slime The way these vets keep u on the ropes... U'd think it was a setup for a 6-1-9 Nice As far as the crew shit goes, even ya comrades know u can't win This nigga so bitch made... If he joined suicide squad, his alias would be Harley Quin Ha Don't be brash. If u throw the gloves on, it's LIGHTS OUT so call it quits Cuz ill punch u One Time n leave ya corpse in clear water on some Keith Thurman shit Ok close All in all this verse was pretty cool imo.. I haven't really peeped much from u, but u got skills dude. U have decent structure & it makes for a nice easy read.. along w/ some cool ideas & concepts that I enjoyed thruout. Nothing in this verse was really that bad.. the only thing I think u coulda maybe done w/out was the temperpedic bar.. other than that, it was a solid verse bro. I enjoyed. Keep at it bro. Pz.