ZenLand Part II

Inno · 04-23-2013, 09:20 PM

this was dope man..i mean jesus your inners and multis are crazy in this piece..i read your other piece as well but didnt reply cuz im like that tho...anyway the flow is what impressed me..you got all this dope ass vocab and complex scheme and yet your flow stayed in tack..no bumps smoother than a babies dick head yo....the story is doep as well..great character development tbh...tho i got one complaint...did you write these at separete times?
felt like it...that all really a bit more cohesion with the first part..but as its own OM..this was fire duke..like blue flames yo.

04-23-2013, 09:20 PM	#1
Inno Ad mini tator Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 10,025 Battle Record: 26-54 Champed - Lime Green Poetry Association - Black August - 1-2 Punch League Rep Power: 85899403	this was dope man..i mean jesus your inners and multis are crazy in this piece..i read your other piece as well but didnt reply cuz im like that tho...anyway the flow is what impressed me..you got all this dope ass vocab and complex scheme and yet your flow stayed in tack..no bumps smoother than a babies dick head yo....the story is doep as well..great character development tbh...tho i got one complaint...did you write these at separete times? felt like it...that all really a bit more cohesion with the first part..but as its own OM..this was fire duke..like blue flames yo.