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HE / HIM / FRAC
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hate racism, I hate ya but none intended here kid
I'll be saying kkk.. as a quick response when i'm asked to read your shit the problem with this idea is that it's so predictable what's coming when you say 'kkk' it makes the flip almost nonexistent. I like the idea but delivering it in a different way (maybe like 'k, k, k') would help a bit, but it's just hard to make that one less predictable acting tough on the board, dissin my man don't feel right bashing muff on the net only cus ya struggling to do that in real life muff/pussy is done to death. If you used this against one of the guys actually fucking with muff a lot it could have the personal angle going for it but tight now it's just a generic to me no friends, fo real ya a loner, mates ya only got a few ya shadow boxing.. guess it'll take up any sport just to get away from you I actually really dig the concept and delivery is good here. Mighta been done before but I haven't seen it heard you did shows but they blow n nobody went me I murder ink while like them your only worth watching for 50 cent Cool idea but all I'm thinking here is that you missed the opportunity to tie in sho's tattoos to make it more personal ya girls a slut pussy's fucked, bitch is damn right filthy cus the bitch be handing out more bangs than des's pic vs jilti forget the pic tbh. I get that sometimes this works well (like karaokes bar about wanderers comb) but generally I'm not a huge fan of taking concepts from another pic queer fuck not showing, lucky last week,probably should duck cus this'll be straight murda.. obviously not ya sexuality the way that you fucked knuck kind of predictable but still alright, but the ending of the punchline took away from it for me. You can probably say 'obviously not your sexuality' a little more concise and the very end is a reminder he beat knuck. Maybe make it about a loss, like '...sexuality the way you let that prettyboy Orc fuck you' or something Got 12 sorry for the late showing again[/QUOTE] Like the concepts but I can tell you didn't have the time to work through them totally. Props for showing, liked the shadowbox line the best |
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