Sunday Mourning

Mr. J · 05-31-2015, 07:42 PM

Falling back into your old ways eh?
Its no lie that you can string together syllables galore as needed
you add the perfect amount of humor as well to replace technicality
I've seen you serve up much stronger verses than this though
at times the reading felt off. it may be due to the hangover..
its odd though. I recall your suggestion of quality over quantity.
and maybe you should apply that to verse as well...I enjoy paragraphs every now and then
and when I see the style from an askew point of view I'm indecisive if I like it.
this may just be a refresher so I wont hold it against you..
but I know deep down in your heart of hearts you can do much better

05-31-2015, 07:42 PM	#5
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	Falling back into your old ways eh? Its no lie that you can string together syllables galore as needed you add the perfect amount of humor as well to replace technicality I've seen you serve up much stronger verses than this though at times the reading felt off. it may be due to the hangover.. its odd though. I recall your suggestion of quality over quantity. and maybe you should apply that to verse as well...I enjoy paragraphs every now and then and when I see the style from an askew point of view I'm indecisive if I like it. this may just be a refresher so I wont hold it against you.. but I know deep down in your heart of hearts you can do much better __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you