Brahmavihara

Zen · 09-25-2014, 03:40 PM

I agree with Kin about this having a similar vibe to Common. The writing in this was a bit different than I'm used to from you, but this was still very good. The lines Kin quoted were good, but I really liked this section the most:

as we learn to be students of life and its beauty
Then we can grasp survival - why we fight for it, truly
as we learn to be students of life and its beauty
Then we can bask in recitals - as disciples of unity

Very good writing. No real critique here. Good stuff.

09-25-2014, 03:40 PM	#7
Zen Arm the Homeless Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,102 Battle Record: 22-24 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 35079722	I agree with Kin about this having a similar vibe to Common. The writing in this was a bit different than I'm used to from you, but this was still very good. The lines Kin quoted were good, but I really liked this section the most: as we learn to be students of life and its beauty Then we can grasp survival - why we fight for it, truly as we learn to be students of life and its beauty Then we can bask in recitals - as disciples of unity Very good writing. No real critique here. Good stuff.