Why does everybody post battle verses, last minute?

Plot · 09-18-2014, 10:43 AM

Why not try and use the time-limit to wrtie a better verse than drop asap?
When writing battle bars you have to learn to write backwards,
by this I mean you need to come up with your punch concept first and
then workout how to best word it. After that you get the chance to workout
the rhymes, schemes and set-up for your punch.

For example Muzzle:

In the last battle I wrote (which you voted against, against everyone else)
" He's prepubescent, got no cash, dope or weapons, he's just a fuckin kid,
If he's growing a 'stashe'... it's just the bum-fluff on his upper-lip."

Not a great bar, but I started with the wordplay concept of 'growing a stash'
mulled over it a while and added the bumfluff-lip bit, this probably wasn't the best way
this concept could have been delivered but I was under a time-limit and went with it.
Next I got to rhyme the bum-fluff upper lip and came up with just a dumb fucking kid. Not perfect nut it fits the theme, then the set-up saying he's prepubescent ie, hasnt got a stash and that he hasnt got any guns, cash or weapons, to form a small weak internal rhyme, which is also a precurser to the overall punch.

So you can see this wasnt a spontansiously written line, it could have taken me 15 minutes to think out my entire 2 bars here...

take a little bit more time with your work and you might find rewards.

09-18-2014, 10:43 AM	#9
Plot Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 1,374 Battle Record: 26-32 Rep Power: 1309744	Why not try and use the time-limit to wrtie a better verse than drop asap? When writing battle bars you have to learn to write backwards, by this I mean you need to come up with your punch concept first and then workout how to best word it. After that you get the chance to workout the rhymes, schemes and set-up for your punch. For example Muzzle: In the last battle I wrote (which you voted against, against everyone else) " He's prepubescent, got no cash, dope or weapons, he's just a fuckin kid, If he's growing a 'stashe'... it's just the bum-fluff on his upper-lip." Not a great bar, but I started with the wordplay concept of 'growing a stash' mulled over it a while and added the bumfluff-lip bit, this probably wasn't the best way this concept could have been delivered but I was under a time-limit and went with it. Next I got to rhyme the bum-fluff upper lip and came up with just a dumb fucking kid. Not perfect nut it fits the theme, then the set-up saying he's prepubescent ie, hasnt got a stash and that he hasnt got any guns, cash or weapons, to form a small weak internal rhyme, which is also a precurser to the overall punch. So you can see this wasnt a spontansiously written line, it could have taken me 15 minutes to think out my entire 2 bars here... take a little bit more time with your work and you might find rewards.