the dam

Alphadog · 08-14-2014, 04:24 AM

Yo pharo, this should be lengthened, very vivid content in this brief piece,
Honestly it was a considerable amount descriptive illustrates which was how i met the characters, creative concepts, not very flowy, but in respect you are a writer not a rapper keep up the work, ill be lookin for similar pieces from you, although i stated above it should be lengthened, it was brief but the story was told, i just thought it ended to soon/quick,.

08-14-2014, 04:24 AM	#2
Alphadog Banned Join Date: Aug 2014 Posts: 35 Rep Power: 0	Yo pharo, this should be lengthened, very vivid content in this brief piece, Honestly it was a considerable amount descriptive illustrates which was how i met the characters, creative concepts, not very flowy, but in respect you are a writer not a rapper keep up the work, ill be lookin for similar pieces from you, although i stated above it should be lengthened, it was brief but the story was told, i just thought it ended to soon/quick,.