Destroyer [VS] Bags [Bags WINS]

Certain · 08-02-2014, 11:23 PM

Destroyer: I watched a Silvia Saint flick yesterday. Weird. I didn't like that line, though, because it didn't seem like much of a punch. I liked the opener a lot and wish you had continued with that level of charisma and outside-the-box thinking. The ill nik-A line was OK, and the sandwiches line was worded very well. The Cheetos line was OK, though it needed a better setup. The "a loan" wordplay has been done about 10 million times, and the "ouch" at the end was brutally bad. And you used a Johnny Knoxville/The Ringer punch? And a paper/plastic Bags punch? Those lines were played five years ago, and that was a really weak way to end this verse, which as a whole was decent.

Bags: The opener killed me. Your wording and swagger come through as well as anyone here, and that helps even average concepts land, like the triangle line. (Nothing could have saved that limb line, though. That wouldn't be a standout in a true freestyle battle.) I thought you overdid the ghostwriting stuff, which was hurt by the fact that your second-best (behind the opener) of those lines was the last, the Ouija board line that was really clever and well-worded. But the two Gamble lines, while perhaps piling on, both made me laugh. Your closer, along with a solid verse through and through, was enough to win this battle, especially since Destroyer's finish was so weak.

Vote: Bags

08-02-2014, 11:23 PM	#16
Certain Mad fucking dangerous. Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 12,066 Battle Record: 40-19 Champed - AOWL Season 3 - Art of Writing League (2x) Rep Power: 85899406	Destroyer: I watched a Silvia Saint flick yesterday. Weird. I didn't like that line, though, because it didn't seem like much of a punch. I liked the opener a lot and wish you had continued with that level of charisma and outside-the-box thinking. The ill nik-A line was OK, and the sandwiches line was worded very well. The Cheetos line was OK, though it needed a better setup. The "a loan" wordplay has been done about 10 million times, and the "ouch" at the end was brutally bad. And you used a Johnny Knoxville/The Ringer punch? And a paper/plastic Bags punch? Those lines were played five years ago, and that was a really weak way to end this verse, which as a whole was decent. Bags: The opener killed me. Your wording and swagger come through as well as anyone here, and that helps even average concepts land, like the triangle line. (Nothing could have saved that limb line, though. That wouldn't be a standout in a true freestyle battle.) I thought you overdid the ghostwriting stuff, which was hurt by the fact that your second-best (behind the opener) of those lines was the last, the Ouija board line that was really clever and well-worded. But the two Gamble lines, while perhaps piling on, both made me laugh. Your closer, along with a solid verse through and through, was enough to win this battle, especially since Destroyer's finish was so weak. Vote: Bags