Namix X-amin - Weekly Writing Challenge - Week 1

[namix]

All are welcome, and those in the cross-training are encouraged, and @Split and @Malachi are enforced yo (since you had the idea and/or reinforced it ;)).

DUE BY EOD FRIDAY, 03.29

CHALLENGE:

10-12 lines, no more or less, dissing EGOs at war
while, more or less, alluding to "less is more"

and use the same end rhyme, even if you mix up the multi leading into it. 10 lines, same end rhyme, with liberty on end rhymes clearly --- rhyme and eye rhyme just fine to myself and i


easy come ease egos


get 'em

[Malachi]

i dont get it egos at war?
@namix

[namix]

Originally Posted by Malachi

i dont get it egos at war?
@namix

you got it -- it's important for me to leave creative liberty bro

the explanation is in the confusion --- egos at war.... diss the war, diss the egos, diss the fact and their fiction, just diss'em.

feel me? feel free to holla if you dont and/or feel differently!!!

[Malachi]

Originally Posted by namix

you got it -- it's important for me to leave creative liberty bro

the explanation is in the confusion --- egos at war.... diss the war, diss the egos, diss the fact and their fiction, just diss'em.

feel me? feel free to holla if you dont and/or feel differently!!!

my bad but can you speak a lil simpler is the a swag/flow piece or what lol?

[namix]

Originally Posted by Malachi

my bad but can you speak a lil simpler is the a swag/flow piece or what lol?

bro, you asked for a test --- then you asked me to make it multiple choice --- now your asking me to fill in the blanks.


fuck homeslice ---swag and flow.. what's one without the other? fuck flow if there's no point, and fuck points with no flow --- i say at least.. but show me what you say through your writing


we've wasted enough character strokes to do a dope collab on the topic brethren, so just get to it, battle the ambiguity and win!

THIS is one of the first obstacles for writers to overcome man. topics too broad, topics too narrow -- dont matter as long as we drop straight.

[namix]

(btw, i sounded more intense than i actually intended lol -- trying to encourage you to literally "GO WITH THE FLOW" bro!)

[Malachi]

lmao word just had to make sure

[namix]

Originally Posted by Malachi

lmao word just had to make sure

no doubt bro, hope you honestly see why though -- because that's part of the battle

creation from within has no boundaries

[Malachi]

Originally Posted by namix

no doubt bro, hope you honestly see why though -- because that's part of the battle

creation from within has no boundaries

i mean whats after this, i know this section is gonna be more than a weekly writing excersize

[namix]

Originally Posted by Malachi

i mean whats after this, i know this section is gonna be more than a weekly writing excersize

i was going to make a gantt chart in visio and/or MS project to visualize my strategic response to your question.... but then my soul punched my cerebral cortex in it's metaphysical throat to metaphorically promote the concept of "letting our hearts be our guide".




just let it flow bro




so just drop it like it's this topic yo
ya got too deep beneath my follicles
ya under my skin; bro, stay mo' topical
honest, find the hottness like its tropical
how'd this single visit turn into a chronicle?
'n why'd the single visit end up bein conjugal?
ya got so many questions.. it's ironically illogical
becuz i'm number one, 'n our skill is chronological
stand out like the monopoly man without a monocle
if that is too impossible... then check the other optical
if ya still dont make a mark, do not hold me responsible
cuz i can make a kid stick-out like a motherfucking popsicle
ya testing my patients like a doctors pop quiz in the hospital
so if ya can stomach a quick spit, as bleeds thru ya abdominal
you can overcome the odds and i'll bet ya even beat my obstacle
isn't even funny how i come off so comical; come'on son, ya prodigal
almost paradoxical - the skill is apparent, but the style's still adoptable

[Split]

Originally Posted by namix

CHALLENGE:

10-12 lines, no more or less, dissing EGOs at war
while, more or less, alluding to "less is more"

First kill, drilled and bored by a synapse's edge,
Watches as the filthy floor contacts his head,
Ecstatic, tactics bred by genetics- or perhaps the master's intent.
If only he'd known. Vessel gush, gentle flush of talent's lens-
A phallic lust tilts the map, blasts miniature figures sprawling across his desk.
Prince's calling. Generals and ledgers, adrenaline measured in conquered men,
The pen bends swords in their sheaths, lions to sheep, wolves in softest beds,
Peons and peasants lost their head when they 'lost their head',
It's consequence, and it's obvious the dictator found addiction again-
Triumph a high and defeat nonexistent, brushes with greatness had "drawn him in"-
But every life taken, death debted him a son nascent with a taste for recompense.
The identity of Gods stay anonymous. Within his city's walls, a thought collects...

[namix]

Originally Posted by Malachi

i mean whats after this, i know this section is gonna be more than a weekly writing excersize

ooh bro, as 'this section' did you mean this specific "Namix X-amin" section - or cross-training in general?

i got grilled a lot for my overall pace of engagement but will pick up with more time - but wrecka and rawn both have some really good ideas to drive and i i'll try to step it up on my end too once some 'ish slows down for me.

in terms of this thread specifically - i will break out 4-5 categories, and track my rankings week-over-week, create a "Namix X-amin Index", based on how average rankings deviate from the average.

needlessly geeky, but i really will track it, and once i do, doing the rest of that is actually the easier part and will be a on-time task.

shiit if someone tracks other voters, i'll apply them to an "overall index", it'd take less than 5 minutes to make a chart and use the slope of it to compare you to everyone else, and weight the slope of the most recent weeks to forecast your progression/regression compared to the whole

is that a cool next step?

[Lotto Smirk]

Man I Thought i must be dreaming For weeks I've been scheming for this moment,to tell the family i'm leaving
Grabbed my ready packed bag, said goodbye to my dad n said "MUM i'm departing for Iraq this evening"
a tear in here eyes, she said this is were ya future lies ,but the image of the army is conceiving
Them words stuck in my mind,Was it truth,was it lies, but it was the army i chose to believe in
I landed in Iraq backpack on my back and already the image looked misconceiving
Friends wiening and fiening to keep there mates breathing, while screaming the army's lies are deceiving
I lasted 2 days of hell, then got pieced by a shell and the nurse couldn't stem the bleeding
This was it, the last few thoughts of my life, Shit i'll never have a kids & wife,this was a horrible feeling
My mother was right, Questions on my mind, Who's going to look after her while she's grieving
I had been there less than a week,No medals for me, it was just death i was achieving
I don't know what pissed me off more,that i won't see my mum anymore or that i had died in a war of no meaning

Bored so i thought i'd hit it up lines are a bit stretched though