Week 13: 11. Zenland (1-1) vs. 12. cyph her (0-1) \\ cyph her wins 7-1

Adonis · 05-26-2014, 12:33 AM

I liked the rhymes zen, although there were some slip ups. I can see this was rushed, but honestly you had solid depth, imagery and emotion up until he received the bill. Not only was it a poor transition from being depressed, at home, drunk on drugs bleeding; to instantly finished with rehab, but I was hoping for the dark theme to continue a bit more. All in all a decent verse for being rushed, I know you can do better, but I can honestly say this was an enjoyable read.

I enjoyed the tone, it read very smooth and still kept precise direction while maintaining flow and emotion, not an easy feet. I loved the read as it literally placed me in the mind of a person, nice concept with self meeting self.

voting cyph her for the better execution and overall giving me the fuller satisfaction after the readings.

05-26-2014, 12:33 AM	#9
Adonis Tsk Tsk Join Date: Feb 2013 Location: Beer Goggles Posts: 4,834 Battle Record: 36-34 Champed - Lime Green Poetry Association - NFL Pick'em 2016-17 Rep Power: 9946449	I liked the rhymes zen, although there were some slip ups. I can see this was rushed, but honestly you had solid depth, imagery and emotion up until he received the bill. Not only was it a poor transition from being depressed, at home, drunk on drugs bleeding; to instantly finished with rehab, but I was hoping for the dark theme to continue a bit more. All in all a decent verse for being rushed, I know you can do better, but I can honestly say this was an enjoyable read. I enjoyed the tone, it read very smooth and still kept precise direction while maintaining flow and emotion, not an easy feet. I loved the read as it literally placed me in the mind of a person, nice concept with self meeting self. voting cyph her for the better execution and overall giving me the fuller satisfaction after the readings. __________________ I'm tryna fuck like A-don-is TUPAC SHAKUR