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05-03-2014, 08:37 PM
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with razor spurs
Join Date: Mar 2014
Location: At David Blaine's favorite place with David Spade and Macy Gray
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Well it flowed nicely yes. But other than that, I'm not really quite sure what you were going for. Nonetheless it was an entertaining read and did offer some imagery along with some good vocabulary. You need to concentrate harder and put your thoughts in order, this shows potential. Keep honing your craft.
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