Week 8 contender match: 3. Mike Wrecka (3-4) vs. 4. El Pancake (3-2) \\ El Pancake wins 4-3

timeless · 04-20-2014, 09:18 PM

Mike, best read you put out this season for sure. Great use of rhyme schemes displayed, your wordplay was the best i've read so far this week. your take on the photo was dope, reminds me of a direction I would take. Only thing id pick at about this would be your use of commas. Just felt like too many times they were not needed. Great read though.

Cake, this was another good take on the topic at hand, loved the tranquil state of mind you displayed your character in on his search for peace living at sea. Kind of a cliche/weak ending, felt you couldve done more there. Writing wise, this was dope though, many quotable lines, flow was awkward at times nothing serious.

Mike had the concept, but I just felt cake developed the more polished enjoyable read. Mike just needed something in there to happen and it seemed like it never did.

V. Cake

04-20-2014, 09:18 PM	#7
timeless past tense Join Date: Nov 2013 Location: NJ Posts: 1,623 Battle Record: 22-39 Rep Power: 4341329	Mike, best read you put out this season for sure. Great use of rhyme schemes displayed, your wordplay was the best i've read so far this week. your take on the photo was dope, reminds me of a direction I would take. Only thing id pick at about this would be your use of commas. Just felt like too many times they were not needed. Great read though. Cake, this was another good take on the topic at hand, loved the tranquil state of mind you displayed your character in on his search for peace living at sea. Kind of a cliche/weak ending, felt you couldve done more there. Writing wise, this was dope though, many quotable lines, flow was awkward at times nothing serious. Mike had the concept, but I just felt cake developed the more polished enjoyable read. Mike just needed something in there to happen and it seemed like it never did. V. Cake