AOWL Week 5: Mike Wrecka (AOWL #1 CONTENDER) (3-1) VS. Adonis (1-0) - ADONIS WINS 8-3

Objective · 03-18-2013, 07:37 AM

Adonis: Cool take on the topic. Kinda emotional. Good execution and flow. Overall a solid piece. Don't really got anything more to add beside of that.

Mike Wrecka: Kinda predictable twist and story. Hell on earth and all that.. I've also read better zombie apocalypse pieces. That he fell and broke his legs seemed rather vague too. Like, seriously? Both of his legs? Couldn't he have twisted his ankle or something? That the main character dies is also kinda clichè for a piece like this. Put more thought into your pieces, a message or something along with it, Idk.. It was a decent verse at best, the flow was choppy at times and the story wasn't all that engaging. It barely kept me entertained enough to read it through without going ''isn't it done yet?'', and I love zombie apocalypses man.

Vote: Adonis. He had a more creative approach to the topic and I liked it better. Mike Wrecka had a decent piece at best, but it wasn't really creative or engaging when it comes down to it.

03-18-2013, 07:37 AM	#8
Objective ( ͡º ͜ʖ ͡º) Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 3,868 Battle Record: 17-32 Rep Power: 52474192	Adonis: Cool take on the topic. Kinda emotional. Good execution and flow. Overall a solid piece. Don't really got anything more to add beside of that. Mike Wrecka: Kinda predictable twist and story. Hell on earth and all that.. I've also read better zombie apocalypse pieces. That he fell and broke his legs seemed rather vague too. Like, seriously? Both of his legs? Couldn't he have twisted his ankle or something? That the main character dies is also kinda clichè for a piece like this. Put more thought into your pieces, a message or something along with it, Idk.. It was a decent verse at best, the flow was choppy at times and the story wasn't all that engaging. It barely kept me entertained enough to read it through without going ''isn't it done yet?'', and I love zombie apocalypses man. Vote: Adonis. He had a more creative approach to the topic and I liked it better. Mike Wrecka had a decent piece at best, but it wasn't really creative or engaging when it comes down to it.