Week 2: Cereal_Killa (1-0) vs. patrown (1-0) \\ patrown wins 6-0

cyph her · 03-09-2014, 07:08 PM

Patrown - This was a bit of an awkward read for me overall. While there were some dope lines.. I felt like you changed direction midway through, as if you had taken a break and come back with a different idea. You started to gain momentum with the characters, but then just fell off all of a sudden.

CK - I enjoyed reading this. I really dug the opening stanza and I feel like there's a topic for it where you could have dominated, but this wasn't it. I really can't figure out what your angle was.

v-Patrown

03-09-2014, 07:08 PM	#6
cyph her decept the con Join Date: Jun 2013 Location: San Jose, CA Posts: 126 Battle Record: 2-2 Rep Power: 0	Patrown - This was a bit of an awkward read for me overall. While there were some dope lines.. I felt like you changed direction midway through, as if you had taken a break and come back with a different idea. You started to gain momentum with the characters, but then just fell off all of a sudden. CK - I enjoyed reading this. I really dug the opening stanza and I feel like there's a topic for it where you could have dominated, but this wasn't it. I really can't figure out what your angle was. v-Patrown