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Old 03-05-2014, 02:40 PM   #10
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this was pretty good overall... the only line i could really do without was

As i ride this roller coaster of emotions and try to cradle my pride

as it didn't really bring anything to the next line or the one before it... on its own it was just kind of filler. still tho good piece
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