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Adonis · 03-02-2014, 10:59 PM

My kids will cry their little eyes out while I beat the shit out my wife

WTF kind of opener is this? I don't whether I should feel angry, ashamed or amazed that you put this, either way, dope beginning.

Decent writing. read almost like a flex, only in topical forum. solid writing for sure, the key with topicals is in the details. I my self love the gruesome, so instead of just saying "They say I would've made it unharmed, If only I was wearing my helmet when I got hit by that car" going into detail about the pain of being struck, flying in the sky, head scrapping the gravel, killing the other car driver even flying through the windshield... To me, this would have been the difference between solid and dope.

03-02-2014, 10:59 PM	#5
Adonis Tsk Tsk Join Date: Feb 2013 Location: Beer Goggles Posts: 4,834 Battle Record: 36-34 Champed - Lime Green Poetry Association - NFL Pick'em 2016-17 Rep Power: 9946449	My kids will cry their little eyes out while I beat the shit out my wife WTF kind of opener is this? I don't whether I should feel angry, ashamed or amazed that you put this, either way, dope beginning. Decent writing. read almost like a flex, only in topical forum. solid writing for sure, the key with topicals is in the details. I my self love the gruesome, so instead of just saying "They say I would've made it unharmed, If only I was wearing my helmet when I got hit by that car" going into detail about the pain of being struck, flying in the sky, head scrapping the gravel, killing the other car driver even flying through the windshield... To me, this would have been the difference between solid and dope. __________________ I'm tryna fuck like A-don-is TUPAC SHAKUR