Black - MOVE

2XL · 02-21-2014, 08:21 AM

Noticing the trend of relationship pieces. But your very good at attacking these

behind the steering wheel on a mescaline binge
telling me you're gonna die unless i tell you to live.
it reminds me of when we were kids. playing Nancy and Sid
inking up our bodies so the past can exist
grasping for grip. all i want is for a movement, a twitch
but i can't move you an inch. life's a beauty, passion's a bitch

one of my favorite parts right here. loved the playing nancy and sid line. kinda crazy figures to be modeled after at young age and reveals how long this relationship has been.
Thought the piece started off slow and unmoving. The whole haze of love and numbness of a troubled relationship where you want to leave but always find yourself caught back up in the attraction; it gets a bit overused. Too comfortable in your own niche. But you prove yourself with the visuals you depict.

relations simmer. making love in a financial position
stagnant, monochromatic. fuck, i've had it, we're finished
but i keep coming back for seconds after a guinness
you shine. you killed icarus. put plants into synthesis
but you gave into the standard constituents.

angel wings, ball and chain contingent. born as a slave
nobody's to blame. let it be neutral, balance the pressure
nobody but the other knows we're fastened together

some more lines i liked. I didnt really get the standard consituents part, but maybe thats just me thinking of the wrong way to use it. Very good read only thing i didnt like was the wrestled disorders part that just kind of threw off the flow and felt put in becuz you couldnt think of an alternative. But beyond that props

02-21-2014, 08:21 AM	#1
2XL Junior Member Join Date: Jan 2014 Posts: 22 Rep Power: 7297	Noticing the trend of relationship pieces. But your very good at attacking these behind the steering wheel on a mescaline binge telling me you're gonna die unless i tell you to live. it reminds me of when we were kids. playing Nancy and Sid inking up our bodies so the past can exist grasping for grip. all i want is for a movement, a twitch but i can't move you an inch. life's a beauty, passion's a bitch one of my favorite parts right here. loved the playing nancy and sid line. kinda crazy figures to be modeled after at young age and reveals how long this relationship has been. Thought the piece started off slow and unmoving. The whole haze of love and numbness of a troubled relationship where you want to leave but always find yourself caught back up in the attraction; it gets a bit overused. Too comfortable in your own niche. But you prove yourself with the visuals you depict. relations simmer. making love in a financial position stagnant, monochromatic. fuck, i've had it, we're finished but i keep coming back for seconds after a guinness you shine. you killed icarus. put plants into synthesis but you gave into the standard constituents. angel wings, ball and chain contingent. born as a slave nobody's to blame. let it be neutral, balance the pressure nobody but the other knows we're fastened together some more lines i liked. I didnt really get the standard consituents part, but maybe thats just me thinking of the wrong way to use it. Very good read only thing i didnt like was the wrestled disorders part that just kind of threw off the flow and felt put in becuz you couldnt think of an alternative. But beyond that props