01-23-2014, 12:15 PM | #1 |
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alcoholics go to meetings. we don't.
its partying season; Bacardi and red bull
im starting this evening with lager that's fresh pulled Ill gargle a neck full, head back to the bar discard the utensils and grab me a jar every glass is a large double to down surpassing the marker; troubles in town fuck it for now, throw me a chaser i'll worry about me owing you later go to my neighbours & piss on the lawn they'll know when they wake up to sick on the floor come drink with me y'all, pickle ya livers some more I've had liquor withdrawal since this prick split my jaw feel free to add on/cypher
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01-23-2014, 01:13 PM | #2 |
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Wack as! Jk lol...this was awesome flow wise, read smoothly from top to bottom...multies were straight.You can be a real dick at times but in all honesty your ability with the pen is nice with it...even tho this is short you kept it more than solid, no doubt you scribbled this up quickly after readin' Wise's joint (or maybe you wrote this before peepin' his idk) either way it's tight, an enjoyable little read...and thanks for the feed man.
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01-24-2014, 03:43 AM | #3 |
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I liked this. If it went darker i wudda loved it, but it was still cool for wat it was. I suggest u up the ante. Props dooder.
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01-24-2014, 06:49 AM | #4 |
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I twist the cap off whatever I'm drinkin
Knock the cops out, never gettin left in a precinct If police think the streets belong to them.. They're wrong again, cause I stay involved in sin So grab a bottle of gin, hit the bong again Hold it in as long as you can, then vomit a mess From two shots in the chest, of toxins avenged Wake up in a hospital dress, with heart monitor tests Your charts hollerin stress, eyes blacker than a goth at his best Lookin like the dark knight of gotham was flexin Shit in your stools like you ate the green goblin for breakfast
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01-24-2014, 02:10 PM | #5 |
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A holy monument to inebriated pugilism worldwide - a masterpiece.
This invocation of Dionysus is rivaled only by the Homeric Odessey in its all encompassing depth and scope...you mention bacardi and red-bull to invoke Hesphaestus, the deformed god of quasi 8-balls via alcohol and caffeine. You mention micturating upon another's land - homage to the testosterone filled folly of youth. All in all a superb effort at reuiniting our spirits with that of Aristotle and Plato, I give this cypher a 9.879/10
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01-24-2014, 03:30 PM | #6 |
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to be honest I think you should record this with beats, The multies sound decent.Master party verse. 10/10
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01-25-2014, 10:45 PM | #7 |
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This is tight. Flow is butter but, man.. I think you left all of us wanting much more. I hope you expand on this piece or idea because it has potential
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Garbage
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01-27-2014, 10:39 AM | #10 |
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I liked this. Flow was on point and the multi scheme was cool. You stayed true to the idea of drinking throughout as well, which gives you points there. I'd like to see more like this from you. Good shit.
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02-05-2014, 05:24 PM | #11 |
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DOPE lars. fuckin effortless smoothness on that schematical illnesss
i love everything u post, lol (in OM) I will be adding on to this cypher with a post about beers/drinking hahah no prob
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02-11-2014, 10:18 AM | #12 |
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If straight
bonin' you would just have me hoppin' off as you only look good with my beer goggles on I see sumthin' be wrong when there's nothin' that's right with you and these girlfriends who are stuck to your side alcohols the best chance you'll get fucked here tonight in your guts would be nice if I was to lower my standards go 'head and lower them pants bitch for every bum that's in sight. |
02-11-2014, 10:55 AM | #13 |
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This was smooth as fuck. Super crisp and made me want to get shit faced lmao. Good shit lars
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02-11-2014, 11:17 AM | #14 |
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i like whiskey and whiskey
bourbon and scotch drink til I'm pissy yeah I'm pissy a lot
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Whack. There is no helping you.
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