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Lars 01-23-2014 12:15 PM

alcoholics go to meetings. we don't.
 
its partying season; Bacardi and red bull
im starting this evening with lager that's fresh pulled
Ill gargle a neck full, head back to the bar
discard the utensils and grab me a jar
every glass is a large double to down
surpassing the marker; troubles in town
fuck it for now, throw me a chaser
i'll worry about me owing you later
go to my neighbours & piss on the lawn
they'll know when they wake up to sick on the floor
come drink with me y'all, pickle ya livers some more
I've had liquor withdrawal since this prick split my jaw

feel free to add on/cypher

Exis 01-23-2014 01:13 PM

Wack as! Jk lol...this was awesome flow wise, read smoothly from top to bottom...multies were straight.You can be a real dick at times but in all honesty your ability with the pen is nice with it...even tho this is short you kept it more than solid, no doubt you scribbled this up quickly after readin' Wise's joint (or maybe you wrote this before peepin' his idk) either way it's tight, an enjoyable little read...and thanks for the feed man.

Stay upwards.

e11even 01-24-2014 03:43 AM

I liked this. If it went darker i wudda loved it, but it was still cool for wat it was. I suggest u up the ante. Props dooder.

Geno 01-24-2014 06:49 AM

I twist the cap off whatever I'm drinkin
Knock the cops out, never gettin left in a precinct
If police think the streets belong to them..
They're wrong again, cause I stay involved in sin
So grab a bottle of gin, hit the bong again
Hold it in as long as you can, then vomit a mess
From two shots in the chest, of toxins avenged
Wake up in a hospital dress, with heart monitor tests
Your charts hollerin stress, eyes blacker than a goth at his best
Lookin like the dark knight of gotham was flexin
Shit in your stools like you ate the green goblin for breakfast

NYCSPITZ 01-24-2014 02:10 PM

A holy monument to inebriated pugilism worldwide - a masterpiece.

This invocation of Dionysus is rivaled only by the Homeric Odessey in its all encompassing depth and scope...you mention bacardi and red-bull to invoke Hesphaestus, the deformed god of quasi 8-balls via alcohol and caffeine. You mention micturating upon another's land - homage to the testosterone filled folly of youth. All in all a superb effort at reuiniting our spirits with that of Aristotle and Plato, I give this cypher a 9.879/10

Dope girl 01-24-2014 03:30 PM

to be honest I think you should record this with beats, The multies sound decent.Master party verse. 10/10

Smooth 01-25-2014 10:45 PM

This is tight. Flow is butter but, man.. I think you left all of us wanting much more. I hope you expand on this piece or idea because it has potential

Natural 01-27-2014 04:57 AM

Garbage

Chaos 01-27-2014 07:43 AM

lmao @Natural what a hatin ass herb

Tic 01-27-2014 10:39 AM

I liked this. Flow was on point and the multi scheme was cool. You stayed true to the idea of drinking throughout as well, which gives you points there. I'd like to see more like this from you. Good shit.

CopyPat 02-05-2014 05:24 PM

DOPE lars. fuckin effortless smoothness on that schematical illnesss

i love everything u post, lol (in OM)

I will be adding on to this cypher with a post about beers/drinking hahah no prob

Exis 02-11-2014 10:18 AM

If straight
bonin' you would
just have me hoppin' off
as you only look good with my beer goggles on
I see sumthin' be wrong when there's nothin' that's right
with you and these girlfriends who are stuck to your side
alcohols the best chance you'll get fucked here tonight
in your guts would be nice
if I was to lower my standards
go 'head and lower them pants bitch for every bum that's in sight.

Just Write 02-11-2014 10:55 AM

This was smooth as fuck. Super crisp and made me want to get shit faced lmao. Good shit lars

dead man 02-11-2014 11:17 AM

i like whiskey and whiskey
bourbon and scotch
drink til I'm pissy
yeah I'm pissy a lot

Natural 02-11-2014 03:55 PM

Whack. There is no helping you.
The tag is appropriate.


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