"Next" - Newest Verse, written tonight.

sacrifice · 02-09-2014, 10:46 PM

I genuinely appreciate the feedback.

I wrote this in a frenzy, and looking back at it now, I can say the following:

I'm personifying the metaphorical connection between my pain and my passion; either in vain attempts at convincing myself that I am "significant," or a description of the struggle through layered imagery; using freedom language and heroism in the final couplet to pay homage to the paradoxical nature of the verse, but with what can be interpreted as a way out in the end.

Otherwise, I do see and understand your points of view.

02-09-2014, 10:46 PM	#4
sacrifice Member Join Date: Jan 2014 Posts: 47 Battle Record: 1-3 Rep Power: 0	I genuinely appreciate the feedback. I wrote this in a frenzy, and looking back at it now, I can say the following: I'm personifying the metaphorical connection between my pain and my passion; either in vain attempts at convincing myself that I am "significant," or a description of the struggle through layered imagery; using freedom language and heroism in the final couplet to pay homage to the paradoxical nature of the verse, but with what can be interpreted as a way out in the end. Otherwise, I do see and understand your points of view. __________________ PhiloInfinitum