AOWL Week 4: patrown (0-0) VS. ZeeDee (0-0) [ZEEDEE WINS, 5-1.]

Split · 03-11-2013, 12:54 AM

Everyone's sleeping on this battle..

ZeeDee. Lol is this Cormier? That verse was sick.. You painted a dope atmosphere right off the bat, and this helped your long story hold together... Also matched the verse really well.the structure and the scheming were ace.. The story really shone through. I can't quote lines, but the first verse and chorus were insane. Stronger multis and inners and polished flow in general would have made this verse an absolute killer

Patrown. This verse was cool... I enjoyed the perspective and choice to not have a character at all, and the vocab was idyllic and simplistic like a tale of ancient times would be. It ended way too quickly, and really doesn't compete with the epic plot ZeeDee drew up considering he didnt slip up badly anywhere

v/ ZD

03-11-2013, 12:54 AM	#11
Split . Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 8,898 Battle Record: 27-22 Rep Power: 85899399	Everyone's sleeping on this battle.. ZeeDee. Lol is this Cormier? That verse was sick.. You painted a dope atmosphere right off the bat, and this helped your long story hold together... Also matched the verse really well.the structure and the scheming were ace.. The story really shone through. I can't quote lines, but the first verse and chorus were insane. Stronger multis and inners and polished flow in general would have made this verse an absolute killer Patrown. This verse was cool... I enjoyed the perspective and choice to not have a character at all, and the vocab was idyllic and simplistic like a tale of ancient times would be. It ended way too quickly, and really doesn't compete with the epic plot ZeeDee drew up considering he didnt slip up badly anywhere v/ ZD __________________ http://split8.yolasite.com