Perhaps...

[Scripter]

"The vast suspension clones these hollow beasts
that feeds on human flesh and common needs.
A shamans aloe vera leaves recieved with warning laughter
expose the souls that mock beliefs with hearts that bleeds the morning after."

I really liked this, It had so much feeling and each line seemed to compliment the next. You are definitely elevated in the way you write and your transitions are impeccable. I would of also liked to of seen more, in this piece.