ROUND ONE: (4)Frank vs. (R)Nigma - (NIGMA WINS 5-4)

[Split]

Frank.


Your story was outshined by your atrocious scheme. I think I've mentioned before that sometimes it works wonderfully to your advantage (Red Glare superman boy verse) and sometimes it effs you in the avy with a slimy AIDS dick. Get tested.

Nuker. Abuser. Nuder. Stubble harpooner (actually lol'd that was a good one)

Your story is also a little wtf. Girl sells herself to man in St. Lucia. Gets called dirty like its her name. Selling her virgjnity for cash but actually is selling herself into slavery for drugs?

But actually was apparently was a cop? She pumps a Ruger into him after she sucked him off/ as the cops arrest him??? Wtf.

This not only invalidates all the empathy i felt for her, but also like... ruins the story.

"Trouble shooter" IMO is a weak, weak connection to the topic... doesn't really embody it, just a passing connection that is forced in at the end

It was a shitty topic. But still. You're a better writer than this



Enigma.


Kinda cool take how you are siphoning the life out of yourself into the computer screen. not horrible for the "Netcees Truu Life Story" category of verses. The mechanics and rhymes were meh. I didn't empathize super hard with your character, lol weed addict. 1st world problems.

Also a lot of forced figurative language. Black chalk. K. Started off like a shitty flex. Yea.



Verdict.


Both of you guys are infinitely better than these verses. No show verse vs. No show verse. It was like all the adults fed their children shots before the 4th grade play, and then we ask Broadway to come review it on THAT night.

I'm gonna vote NIGMA because I enjoyed his use of language more.