To Conquer Open Mic

[big baby]

Originally Posted by Aero

That piece is pretty nice but its hard to retrain my mind to have a bar that's not a comedic punchline. Plus I write my punchlines first then fill my verse around them. An open mic piece has to work differently.

You're not a real writer, then. But you can be a quarter of what I was 10 years ago on a bad day if you try everyday and get up half an hour earlier to meditate further than you do now. I stopped writing punchlines when I was 11. You, at an eager 21+ are still writing punchlines and think you are a writing god. And this has caused severe damage to your writing. You can listen to all the advice given here, except Certain's. He will always critique what you are saying unless it hits him emotionally, which is a bias he can't support but he's an editor programmed to think a certain way because that's what he gets payed to do. Editors, journalists, and bloggers all understand a fundamental of writing but they rarely achieve true emotional, high-end writing. Like Tim Duncan, a fundamental machine, but lacks the true gift of extreme athleticism and just superbly out of this world aesthetics. But he's one of the greatest. But Tim Duncans in the writing world don't come around often. And it's periodically that I have to step out of my shell and big baby kamehameha the writing world once again. But the Certains of the writing world are good writers and need to be there to set a certain precedent. (no weak pun intended). With time, in about a few years you can reach certains level where he was 5 years ago, but with dedicated craft you can reach that echelon sooner than later. In reality you'll never reach my stature because it's like launching a laser beam from a ship travelling supersonic velocities, you were already topping out the ships maximum level before you shot the laser beam, so catching it is virtually impossible. I am that laser beam. You are the NASA operator on Earth couple light years away giving the OKAY to the pilots to launch my laser beam lyrical onslaught. All forms of writing I have conquered, while you are stuck on punchlines and netcees writing only viewed by a few thousand people (if that). MY writing transcends human emotion and logistical ports. To become a better TOPICAL writer, follow certains advice, certain is sort of a savvy gunslinger when it comes to that. Though, I am as well, Certain has more of an outlook to it and has a guideline most likely by his computer where he types from off handedly pointing out every flaw or non-flaw that a particular writing has. If VERITAS says your writing is good, ignore him as he is horrible. Try reading and learning as you go, is the best advice I can give you. You will do fine if you steer clear from my path. This is me acting like you, giving advice to yourself, I did this by nature, so you could fully grasp what I'm saying in your little galaxy you've created. Peace.

[StarFaggot]

Originally Posted by Certain

Start out by coming up with a thesis or story line, then write about that and nothing but that. Tell the story or deliver the message completely while using good rhyming fundamentals. Worry about abstract stuff later because it's harder to be good at.

Originally Posted by big baby

You're not a real writer, then. But you can be a quarter of what I was 10 years ago on a bad day if you try everyday and get up half an hour earlier to meditate further than you do now. I stopped writing punchlines when I was 11. You, at an eager 21+ are still writing punchlines and think you are a writing god. And this has caused severe damage to your writing. You can listen to all the advice given here, except Certain's. He will always critique what you are saying unless it hits him emotionally, which is a bias he can't support but he's an editor programmed to think a certain way because that's what he gets payed to do. Editors, journalists, and bloggers all understand a fundamental of writing but they rarely achieve true emotional, high-end writing. Like Tim Duncan, a fundamental machine, but lacks the true gift of extreme athleticism and just superbly out of this world aesthetics. But he's one of the greatest. But Tim Duncans in the writing world don't come around often. And it's periodically that I have to step out of my shell and big baby kamehameha the writing world once again. But the Certains of the writing world are good writers and need to be there to set a certain precedent. (no weak pun intended). With time, in about a few years you can reach certains level where he was 5 years ago, but with dedicated craft you can reach that echelon sooner than later. In reality you'll never reach my stature because it's like launching a laser beam from a ship travelling supersonic velocities, you were already topping out the ships maximum level before you shot the laser beam, so catching it is virtually impossible. I am that laser beam. You are the NASA operator on Earth couple light years away giving the OKAY to the pilots to launch my laser beam lyrical onslaught. All forms of writing I have conquered, while you are stuck on punchlines and netcees writing only viewed by a few thousand people (if that). MY writing transcends human emotion and logistical ports. To become a better TOPICAL writer, follow certains advice, certain is sort of a savvy gunslinger when it comes to that. Though, I am as well, Certain has more of an outlook to it and has a guideline most likely by his computer where he types from off handedly pointing out every flaw or non-flaw that a particular writing has. If VERITAS says your writing is good, ignore him as he is horrible. Try reading and learning as you go, is the best advice I can give you. You will do fine if you steer clear from my path. This is me acting like you, giving advice to yourself, I did this by nature, so you could fully grasp what I'm saying in your little galaxy you've created. Peace.

lol this guy, good stuff