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Old 12-28-2013, 02:15 AM   #4
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this is another drop of yours that invoked emotion in me, i just cant pin point how i feel, and given the title and the subject matter i guess that is exactly what was intended. at times i felt anger, other times depressed and feeling self pity. i like the way you construct your bars, though a couple lines were off in this one.

My soul is bleeding and needing a medikit to keep on breathing
Emptyness. My friendliness trait is taking a monstrous beating.
Social recluse my consciousness is eating itself to commit suicide
Admit to a ruined life and indulge in the lows of the self loathe
Dehumanized by the numerous lies and let the revenge grow

with the suicide line - the transition was there, but as i was reading it, it kind of messed the flow up for me. maybe i was reading it the wrong but everything else but that was fluid, so that kind of hemmed me up a bit. other than that shit was good, so i dont take anything from it because of the depth. as intricate is that was you can afford to switch pace like that.
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