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Join Date: Dec 2013
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this is another drop of yours that invoked emotion in me, i just cant pin point how i feel, and given the title and the subject matter i guess that is exactly what was intended. at times i felt anger, other times depressed and feeling self pity. i like the way you construct your bars, though a couple lines were off in this one.
My soul is bleeding and needing a medikit to keep on breathing Emptyness. My friendliness trait is taking a monstrous beating. Social recluse my consciousness is eating itself to commit suicide Admit to a ruined life and indulge in the lows of the self loathe Dehumanized by the numerous lies and let the revenge grow with the suicide line - the transition was there, but as i was reading it, it kind of messed the flow up for me. maybe i was reading it the wrong but everything else but that was fluid, so that kind of hemmed me up a bit. other than that shit was good, so i dont take anything from it because of the depth. as intricate is that was you can afford to switch pace like that.
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Padded Room Diaries: Entry One. Entry Two, Genius vs. Insanity Margin scribble Entry Three: Sporadic thoughts. Entry 4: Bars Attacks Rebel Yell Series: Rebel Yell |
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gay shit, horrible topical, rap (with an extra e), rape grats, wack eminem imitation |
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