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Natural 12-27-2013 09:39 AM

O.C.D. Knock Knock motherfucker (vent)
 
I'm locked in a box with brain rott from the drawn out drama
Ocd knocks on the top of my skull, maybe its my dang karma
Look closely at my dish pan hands from the self harm I do
To much washing and over caution, is this raising alarms for you?
Antibacterial charm ensues when I think about arial disease
I wanna just bury these worries and reach a fuckin treaty
I'm beating this shit, relieving the deceiving greedy demon
I'm filling this bottomless pit, causing the illness problem to quit
Life is a murderous bitch, deserting, it'll split hurting a bit
My soul is bleeding and needing a medikit to keep on breathing
Emptyness. My friendliness trait is taking a monstrous beating.
Social recluse my consciousness is eating itself to commit suicide
Admit to a ruined life and indulge in the lows of the self loathe
Dehumanized by the numerous lies and let the revenge grow
One day ill be an unhinged door and fly off of the handol(handle)
Now let's end the story by putting out the flame to the candle

Just Write 12-27-2013 12:04 PM

I like how you were playing around with your schemes. Seemed like you had fun writing this. This kinda resonated with me because my brother is bipolar and has a bunch of ocd trates too.watch silver lining screenplay, awesome movie. Are you ocd or were you just writing about it?

FR33KtheG33K 12-28-2013 02:15 AM

this is another drop of yours that invoked emotion in me, i just cant pin point how i feel, and given the title and the subject matter i guess that is exactly what was intended. at times i felt anger, other times depressed and feeling self pity. i like the way you construct your bars, though a couple lines were off in this one.

My soul is bleeding and needing a medikit to keep on breathing
Emptyness. My friendliness trait is taking a monstrous beating.
Social recluse my consciousness is eating itself to commit suicide
Admit to a ruined life and indulge in the lows of the self loathe
Dehumanized by the numerous lies and let the revenge grow

with the suicide line - the transition was there, but as i was reading it, it kind of messed the flow up for me. maybe i was reading it the wrong but everything else but that was fluid, so that kind of hemmed me up a bit. other than that shit was good, so i dont take anything from it because of the depth. as intricate is that was you can afford to switch pace like that.

Natural 12-28-2013 04:56 AM

Appreciate the looks.

Natural 01-04-2014 05:32 PM

Bump

Natural 01-04-2014 05:42 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Just Write (Post 236866)
I like how you were playing around with your schemes. Seemed like you had fun writing this. This kinda resonated with me because my brother is bipolar and has a bunch of ocd trates too.watch silver lining screenplay, awesome movie. Are you ocd or were you just writing about it?

@Just Write
Yeah I have O.C.D.
It is quite different from being bi polar....but yeah.
My initial goal was to just vent about my o.c.d. and then I just went ape shit with my scheming.
Either way glad you enjoyed it.

NYCSPITZ 01-09-2014 06:09 AM

lol you are a horrible writer. Why criticize those above you when your IQ is sub 100? That's like a 5th grader criticizing Hemingway for word usage, lol dumb faggot

NYCSPITZ 01-09-2014 06:11 AM

Since you are imitating eminem (badly) I'll give you some advice though: "music is reflection of self". Now re-read this verse and get your fucking life together, dumbass...

Natural 01-09-2014 07:37 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Totoro (Post 245941)
I have Natural on ignore because he kept picking on me in discussion. I made an attempt to ask him what his problem was, in a frustrated bitch sort of way but he didn't answer back. In a fit of rage I decided to find one of his open mic drops and tell him how much I didn't enjoy it. Yeah I hope that one hurts his feelings. Serves him right. .

My apologies young lad....
Please don't go thinking any less of yourself
I was just joking around. Truely

P.s.
I am not imitating eminem. I have O.C.D. thanks.

NYCSPITZ 01-09-2014 09:03 AM

hahaha oh yea bro that's it ... it totally has nothing to do with the fact that your writing sucks big sweaty mammoth cock...

Natural 01-09-2014 09:27 AM

Your right. It has nothing to do with it.
Your just mad bro. Its ok. Bye now

NYCSPITZ 01-10-2014 03:58 AM

lol, I'm not mad though. You're just a sub-par writer...

bye faggot

Natural 01-10-2014 07:30 AM

When I want your opinion I'll give it to you.
Your excused.

NYCSPITZ 01-10-2014 08:50 AM

sorry doesn't work that way you dumb, illiterate faggot.

Let me type like u: Of coarse your an idiot. Youre opinion doesnt matter. Bye faggot.


Lmao, sounds like you're in denial about your whole life, dumbass.


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