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11-26-2013, 02:50 PM
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OM FAMILY FOREVER
destined for greatness
impressive yet heinous test it & hate it... I bet it's just strenuous Infectious, abrasive Bringing tension to haters So I dare yall to question your maker! While u garner acceptance get slaughtered for reference this is the beating ur mother deflected I'm gutter, demented I offer a lecture Thank me in hell I'm tougher than pressure Banking on sales. But this is reality Take your possessions This is my charity Wait for progression This is disparity Fair or not this was written Share the plot or stick to quittin Stare at cops with lips for hittin It’s the same routine, no one entertains new schemes so I blame you teens for lack of originality & novelty the brain’s too keen on lames who dream of parody then awfully… copy each other. It’s a shame to see It's some type of reign you fiend I'll body these fuckers Guess I’m way too mean plus I walk this earth unharmed put my worth on charms, so how’ll the sloppy recover? I can serve y’all hard but why’d the Godly be bothered?! I’d rip you nerds apart as it only takes one word to scar try & conserve ur hearts, I dare u to stop me from slaughter. then observe your parts getting chopped deep in water. yea I’m a G till I die while no one’s believing your lies see as write is it cool that this isn’t a paragraph?!? we, not alike are u tools' visions embarrassed as weak gossip types then say ur lines are dope the props are tight & yes all them white So guess it's time to gloat OM guys have designed their hope Stick together Hoping to live forever All of a sudden these kids are better "Oh yea, that shit is clever!"
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11-26-2013, 03:03 PM
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Arm the Homeless
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This was actually pretty entertaining even I'm an "om guy" and this was a slight diss towards me. Still, this was something that I enjoyed.
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11-26-2013, 03:21 PM
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liked the short schemes overall but some of the wording was a lil too sloppy.
we not alike to props are tight was the highlight of it for me Keep keyin
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11-26-2013, 10:58 PM
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POW MOTHAFUCKA POW COME UP OFF THAT CHAIN
do you know how to pronounce strenuous? i have my doubts.
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11-26-2013, 11:03 PM
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dope shit man...flowed like butter lol
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11-27-2013, 09:35 AM
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Illmatic. Strenuous worked for me to, btw
Cool flex nik-a.
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11-27-2013, 10:42 AM
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Mad fucking dangerous.
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11-27-2013, 10:45 AM
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This shit sucked donkey nuts.
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11-27-2013, 10:45 AM
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so unique and novel. really awesome bro.
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11-27-2013, 11:00 AM
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Shit was hot.
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12-07-2013, 01:55 PM
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Razor-thin derision
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lol this was cool. Your ending was unique compared to what I'm used to from you. It was making a mockery, but it was also oddly open-minded in tone.
So guess it's time to gloat OM guys have designed their hope Stick together Hoping to live forever All of a sudden these kids are better "Oh yea, that shit is clever!" ^Since there are clever writers doing it, I found that this wasn't completely opposed to ALL the writers. It was meant for your intended frienemies, but it came out ambiguously. I liked that. Another original spin from you, nik. Keep doing you |
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