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half moronic, magna karma, student of change only blackbird who spread his wings and flew to the cage stupid, forsaken, youths in a basement, practicing bondage bleeding ropes for every goal we haven't accomplished do we have to be honest? i'd rather shatter a promise abandon my apartment. head back to the cottage, passive. subtle nuances like genetical code bloodline syndromic, telegraphing punches to throw semi-morose, fully corrosive settled in smoke filter larynx through a gravel pit. Inspectah Verbose chemical dosage, mescaline Motrin. plastic and paper addicts are saviors, viewed as lepers now cause habit is nature indulgence is nature, food is a drug. who's pulling the plug? everybody plays the fool .. if they're foolish enough translucent, Zab Judah when shadowboxing your fate napping lucid awake. camouflage and oxygen tanks democracy, pick-pocketing, apocryphal, fake now apologize again, just for apologies' sake nodding away those labor pains on leather recliners my homie used to put the wet to a lighter, setting the fire never higher. February paints a painful maroon Thorazine blues settled in. you wouldn't make it to June crescent moon, powder boom, kegstand naked at noon life's a black dinner spoon - insufflate it or lose hatred is useless, drop the mask, face your confusion pick the pieces up and make it your movement. MATE
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Zack Wicks for president Last edited by dead man; 11-08-2013 at 04:11 PM. |
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Was really dope, I'll feed you in a bit. Kinda dropped off at the end but the rhymes were nasty
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I will be reading this, I'd imagine later on tonight in the depths of dawn, coming down off Molly with a freshly loaded bowl of og kush in front of me just like ........... Gone
Edit: just read it. dope shit. sporadic. kind of different from your usual stuff.
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"black as midnight..black as pitch blacker than the soul of the foulest witch" Last edited by Wise Wiggles; 11-13-2013 at 09:14 PM. |
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Another dope drop from you, people are making feeding easy lately. Enjoyed the uhm.. what can I call it? The somewhat repetitive lines where you build on to what you started to say.
I'm talking about this shit: everybody plays the fool .. if they're foolish enough & this: now apologize again, just for apologies' sake Enjoyed the phrasing of those lines and they fit well with their previous lines as well. Kinda agree with Split about the last few lines, but overall you did a really great job with this and I enjoyed the read. Keep droppin'.
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This was killer man, it did sorta taper off towards the end, but still. The way you can use high intelligence vocabulary like child's play is incredible. Usually its just using big words to sound smart, but every one was relevant, clever and perfectly played. Diggin the subject matter of over indulgence and the affects on those who care about the user.
Straight from the top with the blackbird flying back to the cage, nodding away the labor pain's, powder boom/kegstands naked at noon... such meaningful, atypical metaphor/wordplay really kept my attention throughout... Deep shit man, lovin it |
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Zack Wicks for president Last edited by dead man; 11-09-2013 at 03:27 PM. |
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good shit as usually. hit me back with a little feed brah, check out my emo shit called better days, i did something different! i wrote it specifically with u in mind and i got nothing!!!!! ur a jerk!!!
then i went back to my regular style and it was much more fun have a little fun black... Inspectah Verbose. was the dopest part, you wouldn't make it to june.. ha. good work. u've had better, but this is till better than most, keep posting. ever try any audio shit man? would be interesting to see for sure lmao @ wise again with his promises of feed and then none comming... u have a habit wise!!! also we should probly collab again eh?? pm me something
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