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Old 11-08-2013, 04:05 PM   #1
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Old 11-08-2013, 04:57 PM   #2
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Was really dope, I'll feed you in a bit. Kinda dropped off at the end but the rhymes were nasty
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Old 11-08-2013, 05:23 PM   #3
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nodding away those labor pains on leather recliners
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Old 11-08-2013, 08:50 PM   #4
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I will be reading this, I'd imagine later on tonight in the depths of dawn, coming down off Molly with a freshly loaded bowl of og kush in front of me just like ........... Gone

Edit: just read it. dope shit. sporadic. kind of different from your usual stuff.
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Old 11-08-2013, 08:53 PM   #5
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Old 11-08-2013, 09:41 PM   #6
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Another dope drop from you, people are making feeding easy lately. Enjoyed the uhm.. what can I call it? The somewhat repetitive lines where you build on to what you started to say.

I'm talking about this shit:
everybody plays the fool .. if they're foolish enough
& this:
now apologize again, just for apologies' sake

Enjoyed the phrasing of those lines and they fit well with their previous lines as well. Kinda agree with Split about the last few lines, but overall you did a really great job with this and I enjoyed the read. Keep droppin'.
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This was killer man, it did sorta taper off towards the end, but still. The way you can use high intelligence vocabulary like child's play is incredible. Usually its just using big words to sound smart, but every one was relevant, clever and perfectly played. Diggin the subject matter of over indulgence and the affects on those who care about the user.
Straight from the top with the blackbird flying back to the cage, nodding away the labor pain's, powder boom/kegstands naked at noon... such meaningful, atypical metaphor/wordplay really kept my attention throughout... Deep shit man, lovin it
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Old 11-09-2013, 11:50 AM   #8
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good shit as usually. hit me back with a little feed brah, check out my emo shit called better days, i did something different! i wrote it specifically with u in mind and i got nothing!!!!! ur a jerk!!!

then i went back to my regular style and it was much more fun

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Inspectah Verbose. was the dopest part, you wouldn't make it to june.. ha.
good work. u've had better, but this is till better than most, keep posting. ever try any audio shit man? would be interesting to see for sure

lmao @ wise again with his promises of feed and then none comming... u have a habit wise!!! also we should probly collab again eh?? pm me something
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