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e11even · 11-03-2013, 08:27 PM

The people eater was purple.

This requires a revision and repost requiting revisits to rate this reeking mess. I like what I thought you were trying to do, but frankly, this was not well written, mostly from a grammatical standpoint. The story was a little muddy too, as it strayed the point with bad language usage. This was an ambitious attempt, apparently aiming at accolade-riddled acceptance and approval. Write more and read more.

nice try though. Srs.

11-03-2013, 08:27 PM	#4
e11even V.V Join Date: Sep 2013 Location: . Posts: 2,076 Battle Record: 31-20 Rep Power: 6247259	The people eater was purple. This requires a revision and repost requiting revisits to rate this reeking mess. I like what I thought you were trying to do, but frankly, this was not well written, mostly from a grammatical standpoint. The story was a little muddy too, as it strayed the point with bad language usage. This was an ambitious attempt, apparently aiming at accolade-riddled acceptance and approval. Write more and read more. nice try though. Srs. __________________ Ahem.