DrunkenSickTwistedNastyFuckRhyme - BeeGee <I'm back>

beegee · 10-08-2013, 03:57 PM

fuck rhyme'n, ya'll can't even breathe with me
I'm a virus in the booth, call the CDC
see round town, i'm known to snatch mic's
spit.. and freestyle chapters of past lifes
who is he? shit, some'll say plain
but son's flows' like a runaway train
motherfuck game, i'm the box it comes in
a few shots of somethin, just to function
grave plots and dungeons, nigga I get deep
archive hundreds of bars in dead sleep
cooler then ya bed sheets, im focused son
ride'n on the track till them locust's come
see my feet shake the ground like thunder do
and my words burn my throat, 200 proof
spitting till my lungs go poof, hocus pocus
my verse's where the bible's oldest scrolls is
just a trained killer under soldiers orders
hotter than the sun's summer solstice scorches
I hold them torches, so ya'll can see the way
tapped into that brain matter beneath the gray
keep thinkin you nice, go head admire ya self
I feel the same way, I only inspire myself
straight murderer, running from siren's at 12
destined to hear the scream'n choirs of hell
while im on this earth the seeds been planted
stretchin flows till i leave this planet
long before my mothers grief and panic
BeeGee that sick nigga from the East Atlantic

it never stops...

Eŋg · 10-08-2013, 09:06 PM

flow is on point. some points were super corn. so much so i almost felt like you went for that. did you? w.e. freestyle chapters of past life was the highlight for me, i fuck with that concept.

Wise Wiggles · 10-08-2013, 09:41 PM

after cooler than ya bed sheets it was sick..

Adonis · 10-09-2013, 02:02 AM

Decent flex. Feel like it deserves to be recorded not shown in a open mic. Flow was good, some shit was just blah. Not the flow, some parts simply read weak. The begining I thought the bars or the syllable rhymes were too small, the middle was perfect, but the end was stretched. Overall decent drop, solid flex though

e11even · 10-09-2013, 06:39 AM

it was almost as if another dude wrote the second half of this lol. this joint had a gradient effect.

"I hold them torches, so ya'll can see the way
tapped into that brain matter beneath the gray
keep thinkin you nice, go head admire ya self
I feel the same way, I only inspire myself"

i liked that part. this will go down as a warm up piece in my book. I look forward to more of your stuff as you get in your zone. good shit.

Dove Dozer · 10-09-2013, 08:22 AM

Yo nice flex bg. Its no good from rmc

beegee · 10-09-2013, 08:48 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Dove Dozer

Yo nice flex bg. Its no good from rmc

How you been son. Still Mil?
We should post some of our collabs on here.

Dove Dozer · 10-09-2013, 12:29 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by beegee

How you been son. Still Mil?
We should post some of our collabs on here.

Ya man, still serving... Ya man. Post em if you got em brah

Just Write · 10-09-2013, 02:52 PM

keep thinkin you nice, go head admire ya self
I feel the same way, I only inspire myself

This was dope, thought the second part was better.

The bar i quoted above is a standout for two reassons. 1 it was my favorite. Almost. This leads me to reason 2. I don't know if it was a typo or what but I think you should have put "only I inspire myself"n the current way it makes it seem like you inspire only yourself but nobody else. Annd that's me reaching lol. I did enjoy this though, I'm down to do the collab though, maybe me you and no good can get sumn goin. Thanks for the feed man. Peace

Mr. J · 10-09-2013, 06:41 PM

Enjoyed this...flow is on point the grave plots and dungeons was dope
the summer solstice line was interesting overall a dope piece I believe
Ill keep reading you keep dropping

Certain · 10-12-2013, 02:44 AM

Throw the first four lines away. Those were terrible. The rest sort of built into something really, really slick by about the three-quarters point.

This part was as good as anything from any flex I've read here:

Quote:

I hold them torches, so ya'll can see the way
tapped into that brain matter beneath the gray
keep thinkin you nice, go head admire ya self
I feel the same way, I only inspire myself

Your flow is natural, another reason to cut the first couplet, which was the only choppy rhyme in the entire verse. This was a strong verse that seemed built for audio.

Geno · 10-12-2013, 05:16 PM

I agree with wise here

After the bedsheets shit this was dope
Welcome back btw, beegee

CopyPat · 10-12-2013, 06:40 PM

awesome. super enjoyable read. mad puns up this mahf, haha good wordplay, flow was smooth as shit. good bar length. nothing wasted, no filler. really good drop. looking forward to more, shit was nice

10-08-2013, 03:57 PM	#1
beegee Member Join Date: Sep 2013 Posts: 32 Rep Power: 0	DrunkenSickTwistedNastyFuckRhyme - BeeGee <I'm back> fuck rhyme'n, ya'll can't even breathe with me I'm a virus in the booth, call the CDC see round town, i'm known to snatch mic's spit.. and freestyle chapters of past lifes who is he? shit, some'll say plain but son's flows' like a runaway train motherfuck game, i'm the box it comes in a few shots of somethin, just to function grave plots and dungeons, nigga I get deep archive hundreds of bars in dead sleep cooler then ya bed sheets, im focused son ride'n on the track till them locust's come see my feet shake the ground like thunder do and my words burn my throat, 200 proof spitting till my lungs go poof, hocus pocus my verse's where the bible's oldest scrolls is just a trained killer under soldiers orders hotter than the sun's summer solstice scorches I hold them torches, so ya'll can see the way tapped into that brain matter beneath the gray keep thinkin you nice, go head admire ya self I feel the same way, I only inspire myself straight murderer, running from siren's at 12 destined to hear the scream'n choirs of hell while im on this earth the seeds been planted stretchin flows till i leave this planet long before my mothers grief and panic BeeGee that sick nigga from the East Atlantic it never stops...

10-08-2013, 09:41 PM	#3
Wise Wiggles nok Su kow Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,507 Battle Record: 1-1 Rep Power: 51788019	after cooler than ya bed sheets it was sick.. __________________ "black as midnight..black as pitch blacker than the soul of the foulest witch"

10-09-2013, 02:02 AM	#4
Adonis Tsk Tsk Join Date: Feb 2013 Location: Beer Goggles Posts: 4,834 Battle Record: 36-34 Champed - Lime Green Poetry Association - NFL Pick'em 2016-17 Rep Power: 9946446	Decent flex. Feel like it deserves to be recorded not shown in a open mic. Flow was good, some shit was just blah. Not the flow, some parts simply read weak. The begining I thought the bars or the syllable rhymes were too small, the middle was perfect, but the end was stretched. Overall decent drop, solid flex though __________________ I'm tryna fuck like A-don-is TUPAC SHAKUR

10-09-2013, 06:39 AM	#5
e11even V.V Join Date: Sep 2013 Location: . Posts: 2,076 Battle Record: 31-20 Rep Power: 6247256	it was almost as if another dude wrote the second half of this lol. this joint had a gradient effect. "I hold them torches, so ya'll can see the way tapped into that brain matter beneath the gray keep thinkin you nice, go head admire ya self I feel the same way, I only inspire myself" i liked that part. this will go down as a warm up piece in my book. I look forward to more of your stuff as you get in your zone. good shit. __________________ Ahem.

10-09-2013, 08:22 AM	#6
Dove Dozer loose leaf bruce lee Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 1,079 Battle Record: 7-6 Rep Power: 1853213	Yo nice flex bg. Its no good from rmc __________________

10-08-2013, 09:06 PM	#2
Eŋg rhyme capsule. Join Date: Sep 2018 Posts: 2,146 Rep Power: 0	flow is on point. some points were super corn. so much so i almost felt like you went for that. did you? w.e. freestyle chapters of past life was the highlight for me, i fuck with that concept.

10-09-2013, 02:52 PM	#9
Just Write Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 1,709 Battle Record: 9-12 Rep Power: 4997614	keep thinkin you nice, go head admire ya self I feel the same way, I only inspire myself This was dope, thought the second part was better. The bar i quoted above is a standout for two reassons. 1 it was my favorite. Almost. This leads me to reason 2. I don't know if it was a typo or what but I think you should have put "only I inspire myself"n the current way it makes it seem like you inspire only yourself but nobody else. Annd that's me reaching lol. I did enjoy this though, I'm down to do the collab though, maybe me you and no good can get sumn goin. Thanks for the feed man. Peace __________________

10-09-2013, 06:41 PM	#10
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,028 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349678	Enjoyed this...flow is on point the grave plots and dungeons was dope the summer solstice line was interesting overall a dope piece I believe Ill keep reading you keep dropping __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

10-12-2013, 05:16 PM	#12
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,330 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036758	I agree with wise here After the bedsheets shit this was dope Welcome back btw, beegee __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est*

10-12-2013, 06:40 PM	#13
CopyPat Mic Check Join Date: Mar 2013 Location: Calgary Alberta Canada Posts: 707 Battle Record: 13-10 Rep Power: 3742222	awesome. super enjoyable read. mad puns up this mahf, haha good wordplay, flow was smooth as shit. good bar length. nothing wasted, no filler. really good drop. looking forward to more, shit was nice __________________ My syllable count approximately a billion, bounce. You cannot compete.