Inspire me - Netcees

01-23-2020, 07:19 PM

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Quote:

Originally Posted by Bodey

this piece just seemed like you were freewriting and not really trying, more venting in some parts. lines like "my mind is a war" could be strengthened with imagery to that shit. I've seen better from you

Thanks. It's more like something with consistent technical rhymes that I can actually rap Ok. But I'll write something deeper next time

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