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Old 02-26-2014, 12:52 AM   #11
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I was hoping to hear you rapping these lyrics, but the beat was sick.

I won't even critique this - it struck me more as a clearing of the storm clouds more than anything, not an attempt beyond that. It's funny to see your explanation after, which usually I don't like (you write, I read, the connections I make are mine kind of thing), but in this case it added a framework to the chaos that I had already picked up upon.

In any case, nothing really to critique in my opinion, felt more like a writing exercise for you, which is always nice since your rhyming is quick and clever. Glad to see you're around, def one of my favorites to read.
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