Patrown - This was a bit of an awkward read for me overall. While there were some dope lines.. I felt like you changed direction midway through, as if you had taken a break and come back with a different idea. You started to gain momentum with the characters, but then just fell off all of a sudden.
CK - I enjoyed reading this. I really dug the opening stanza and I feel like there's a topic for it where you could have dominated, but this wasn't it. I really can't figure out what your angle was.
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