Scorrie pipíen

[Zombie]

Never going to dance again, stay tuned to the oddities’ dissonance
These feet aren’t guilty until solemnly proven innocent
It’s obviously you. The instrument.
Etch graffiti on my vertebrae. Sketching a sketch while it randomly percolates
Drawing burgundy blood on my canvass, paint blushes the murder rate
So disgustingly shy, it shutters the sky red
Underlined by the blood-shot amplification of the iris
The eye cannot vividly see, what isn’t visibly shown.
Visions syncope closed. And the sights the imagery’s black sea.
Imagine swimming in aquatic ink, waves of metallic jet gray
Emphatic. Your head dazed. Underlay a set haze.
Cause in sky, I can see rips. If you pry, where it seasons
Through Your Highness, it’s weakness.
Just please, try and defy what this beast spits, David, visit’s Goliath at his funeral
Truly, cause’ beauty is in the eyes of behemoths. They’re up high, the scenery’s beautiful.
A musical, without actors. Horizontal teleprompter, the crowd squawks encore
Just a light show of shadows where fall leaves rumble a rustling ensemble
feeling obscene chemical blast grids. Interweave a cut-scene of technical synapses.
Cause this naked eyes, shy. Fuck, it’s covering up it’s privacy parts
Blinking is only half the battle, cause opening up’s hard.
The spoon in silver lining in my mouth is dying to talk

[Zombie]

i just said stuff

[PiE]

There's a lot of visual graphics in there, but it doesn't seem to all tie together as well as I'd like. I know there's a bunch of metaphors for what this means and I can catch some of them, but some of them aren't so easily defined to me.

I liked this line

Drawing burgundy blood on my canvass, paint blushes the murder rate


but I don't get this one

So disgustingly shy, it shutters the sky red

how does shyness color the sky the color of blood and war?

well, some of it was interesting.

[God Of War]

for some crazy ass reason i read the name as scottie pippen rofl

[PancakeBrah]

Usual excellence. There were some streams of rhymes and thoughts I was jealous of.

[Spoken]

Zombie this was rather an interesting read and tbh you just made me want to write go a stronger reason. You have really inspired me friend. The stream of thoughts in this was sort of intricate but had thy nice mellow flow to it. Nice shit I liked this alot and it really stood out but then again like said above... You just said stuff and it didn't reall tie to a certain diction more so like a vent of thought but still a nice drop man

[Zombie]

Thanks, story and pancake. very flattering. also GoW. Im glad you picked up on that. It was supposed to be that way. very keen

[dead man]

Cool enough. Ending and beginning were your peaks by a long shot.

[God Of War]

Never going to dance again, stay tuned to the oddities’ dissonance
These feet aren’t guilty until solemnly proven innocent
It’s obviously you. The instrument.
Etch graffiti on my vertebrae. Sketching a sketch while it randomly percolates
the flow here was really nice the last 2 lines was G i thought

Drawing burgundy blood on my canvass, paint blushes the murder rate
So disgustingly shy, it shutters the sky red
Underlined by the blood-shot amplification of the iris
this was a nice part pretty descriptve

The eye cannot vividly see, what isn’t visibly shown.
Visions syncope closed. And the sights the imagery’s black sea.
Imagine swimming in aquatic ink, waves of metallic jet gray
Emphatic. Your head dazed. Underlay a set haze.
Cause in sky, I can see rips. If you pry, where it seasons
Through Your Highness, it’s weakness.
this was really nice and the flow was smooth

Just please, try and defy what this beast spits, David, visit’s Goliath at his funeral
Truly, cause’ beauty is in the eyes of behemoths. They’re up high, the scenery’s beautiful.
this is my fav bar of the piece, this is dope as fuck i thought

A musical, without actors. Horizontal teleprompter, the crowd squawks encore
Just a light show of shadows where fall leaves rumble a rustling ensemble
feeling obscene chemical blast grids. Interweave a cut-scene of technical synapses.
Cause this naked eyes, shy. Fuck, it’s covering up it’s privacy parts
Blinking is only half the battle, cause opening up’s hard.
The spoon in silver lining in my mouth is dying to talk
nice ending



this was a really dope piece i actually thought, at first read i thought it was to spaced out but then i read it again when i was high and the meta's is really nice they hit well and the writing in genereal is good, its almost got the feel that its covering alot of ideas but then that it doesnt lol its weird i dont know im high as shit but thought it was really dope, the ending line and the david goliath part was my faves