Audio snippet TIC

[Scripter]

https://soundcloud.com/evild81/tic

Something I'm working on.

[Kin]

Damn I guess that was juz a snippet...
Could be wrong but im guessin that was a written u were tryna match to thiz beat insteada writing somethin juz for it?....
Rhyme scheme is crazy...kinda on some rugged man shit....dont really feel it fits this beat tho....but id be down to mix this for u when its complete if u want....good to see someone steppin up to the mic bro...keep it at

HoLLa

[Scripter]

Dam I'd appreciate that, thanks for the feed.

[blueflamez]

The beats are Nice, first track you Started to fast or something but you caught yourself and made up for it. You jUst need to get comfortable with how you want to attack it and Just go in on it, Nice non t the less bro

[Scripter]

I agree it is a little choppy in the beginning but I am still working on it. I may drop more right before the verse that I started on or just get rid of the beginning all together. I am not really sure yet. Making music is all new to me. I have been recording on my phone because I don't have a mic for my PC. So right now I'm just fleshing things out.
Thanks for the feed, I appreciate it.

[CopyPat]

yo man im gonna be real with u. i have never heard u before so im basing my opinion on this snippet alone but first thing that was painfully obvious was that ur lyrics did NOT match this beat... as in the tempo of this beat required less words in each bar and u clearly tried to cram in some existing written that could not fit onto this beat. you were spitting WAY too fast and it was essentially inaudible what u were saying. BIG thing u have to work on is writing TO the beat, just keep that shit on repeat while ur writing and u will automatically know when a line is too long or too short. second is ur monotone style which just sounds like ur literally just reading it off the page. u need to emphasize certain words and flow spit with a little more heart. again if the bars are written properly in terms of length this will be alot easier. since u were sonic zooming through your lyrics there was no choice but to be monotone because u simply had no time to alter anything in terms of your breath etc.

anyways props for even posting an audio, keep workin on it and practicing. and always write your lyrics to a beat and it'll come eventually. Have u listened to Genocide from here??? if not you should and you'll get a better understanding of what im talking about. stay up

[Scripter]

I have been working on my emphasize and mono tone, it still needs work I agree.
Thanks for the feed.