Stranger

[Scripter]

https://soundcloud.com/evild81/stranger

Its gotta be an anomaly to be as bomb as me
maybe you seen strange
but I'm a comet seen
better think again before you come at me
you'll be whats left of a coma cosmic scene
cuz I come in peace like a killer bee
take over your nest and kill your colony
that's natures creed
I'm just
your just a regular denatured cup of tea
don't need none of your fun puppetry
just shut the fuck up before I cut your strings
want love and peace no war
but sure come stinging if you corner me
It's whats born in me
get torn more
in your own corridor
cause envy's sure to bleed
I put the work in
people are afraid to pull back their sleeves
set their minds free
just to achieve

[Adonis]

Bad quality and your jump ins are hell of obvious bro. Lyrically. Aside from audio. This was a solid verse. I liked how kept line concepts afloat a few bars later, A la, Bee/Sting if cornered. I enjoyed the writing for it was, not so much over beat, but the actual writing yes.

[Scripter]

Thanks for the feed! I am still a little new with trying to record on a beat. It definitely takes time and skill to find the perfect timing. I just dropped this to see how it would sound. I know I can do better if I took more time recording and used a program like Audacity to record.

[Adonis]

http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=89538

Thanks go there

[blueflamez]

Beat: ok
lyrics: not the worst but a little mediOcre
mp: need to ride the beat better
punches: n/a
metas:n/a
overall: needs work, that you know already but just keep practicing