... vs fathead {... wins}

[~RustyGunZ~]

NBL
Netcees Text Battle League

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@... @fathead

[Split]

pretty much a blowout

... is a name for faggots. ... loses

V/fathead

[fathead]

10

[...]

I'll have this up today...Been superrrrrrrr busy

[...]

sent 10...g'luck

[fathead]

When It Comes To Rhymes Dude Just Cant.Compete/
And When Writing His Lines He Puts Himself To Sleep/
cant You Understand This Man Needs Help/
On A Rap Forum He Cant Make A Name For Himself/
And Ill Stomp This Bitch/
Whos Named After His Acomplishments/
And I Stand On My Own To FeEt/
Hes Kevin Ware Im A Centipede/
But Enough About You Wack NamE Lets Talk About Your Clever Rhymes.../
Ok Nevermind/

[...]

was told she was a girl a few minutes ago....

No matter how many sew-ins u get...u'll never look like the modelin chicks
nobody cares if urs hairs remy, when ur face looks like its been hit wit a bottle of it
no one like this dumb broad, cuz she's ratchet n dumb
so when they said someone ran a train on u...we just hoped it was actually one
& don't deny that ur a dyke, who dreams abt fuckin broads
cuz the only reason you named urself fathead was so u cud touch a wall
+ voters HATE readin her shit, cuz truth is she cant rap
so when they say they lookin forward to a headline, it applies to the champ match

one fish two fish
yo pussy smells RUTHLESS

[...]

g'luck...

[fathead]

Good Luck man

[Plot]

...wins for the train Line

[Sharp]

cant You Understand This Man Needs Help/
On A Rap Forum He Cant Make A Name For Himself/

V

No matter how many sew-ins u get...u'll never look like the modelin chicks
nobody cares if urs hairs remy, when ur face looks like its been hit wit a bottle of it
no one like this dumb broad, cuz she's ratchet n dumb
so when they said someone ran a train on u...we just hoped it was actually one



Fathead actually had decent concepts in there, but the awkward wording, formatting and sometimes bar length took away from it. Fathead, i can see you doing some damage if you get a better handle on how to write a verse out.
... was decent, had good wording, okayish concepts and took it pretty easily.

V/ ...

[StarFaggot]

Ok ... The headline was cool rest was ok. Fathead I liked the accomplishments line. Ur delivery lacked and is why u lost.

Vote ...

[Flow]

Sharp pretty muched summed this up for me... Though I feel he said it in a nicer way. Your lines were too short fat.
You had a nice line with the make a name for yourself, probs lotb for me especially with how short your lines were so gratz on pulling that off, but the rest of your verse was god awful. Expand your lines an execute better. I feel ... Took this easily but I think he got of easy, few more battles an I think you'd of taken this.

Vote ... By default

[Twenty One]

if fat head would of fixed his structure an lines better imo he would of got this wasnt really anything to break down ... had the overrall better thought out verse concepts okay fats had some good ideas tho just lacked in lenght

vote ......

[R!canTheoryz]

Vote - .... For the obvious Reasons. he Simply Had The More Well Rounded Verse Executed Punches & Personals
fathead needs slight elevation to Complete tho

[Untold]

... Just had the more polished verse all around here. But don't get me wrong, I could see where fathead was going with most of her punches, she just wasn't sure how to either word or execute them properly. I really dug ...'s opening bar and his train line. Good stuff.

V/ ...