04-15-2013, 03:34 AM | #1 |
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never let go
We live in a world
where sinning's the beginnin to winning the race 2 separate worlds a collision of visions spark infinite fluctuations of time and space I want that you want me You got it don't taunt me I'm feeling like feelings are just here to haunt me Im losing my mind but choosing to find That chewing the food for my thoughts is ruining mine! A penny for a thought Nickles for a sentence Quarters in my pocket dimes in my presence. Gold in my lungs Coal on my tongue Jay Z's on the radio But I'm forever young. Distorting the fortress I've built on my heart Debating importance where do I start? I was 5 maybe 6 When I had my first kiss she moved out of state and just left me wit this. "That was fun yesterday when we played with our lips But I don't think I love you" Shit we were just kids! But somehow that love story always replays I give out my heart And watch it decay. We're in 2 different worlds But when they collide We will survive And remain you and i. Goodbye my memories Until we meet again I'll be waiting at this table with paper and pen. |
04-15-2013, 11:42 PM | #2 |
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04-16-2013, 03:56 PM | #3 |
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Fantastic, flow was on point, very rhymable if thats a word lol images were crisp and i liked the ending of how we are expecting one thing and booom we get hit with something else. The whole money metaphor was my favorite part, too. Dimes in my presence lol
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05-01-2013, 03:53 AM | #4 |
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Lol thanks man my bad I forgot I had posted this
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05-01-2013, 01:25 PM | #5 |
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Fuck man this was some pretty good shit. Nice flow. It had that kinda stutter step to it if that makes any sense lol. But also some nice quoteables in here.
Im losing my mind but choosing to find That chewing the food for my thoughts is ruining mine! ^^Definatly my favorite part of this. Nice. All in all you got some good shit man. Keep droppin but remember to drop feed on other posts as well. |
05-01-2013, 07:54 PM | #6 |
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thanks man i dont got net at my house unless i'm on my baby mamas phone so i aint able to feed as much as i need lol i got you now tho
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