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YDK · 11-20-2013, 11:02 PM

I just been sitting here trying ta get adjusted,
working too much for easy money got me feeling disgusted,
taking advantage of situations wit the one I'm in love wit,
Ignoring my girl so I can write tal'm bout poetic justice.
Damn, an I just got her back,
got the woman of my dreams wit my daughter on her lap,
an I ain't gonna front I'm fuckin ecstatic for that,
so why I'm always stressing Cuz I cant smoke a sack?
I'm over the fact that I'm halfway sober an shit,
so I can't really complain about being broke wit a kid.
Atleast I gotta family now,
it took a lot of losses ta bring the man in me out,
but I been working every day I gotta plan wit me now,
just look at how I'm coping with insanity wow!
I used to hate dealing with this,
got me feeling like a kid when I'm stealing a kiss.
She's passed out on the couch when I'm leaving at 6,
But that early in the morning I know she's sleepless as Shit.
there ain't much left ta say an even less ta be debated
Just know that while I'm working your still appreciated.

Fig · 11-20-2013, 11:18 PM

Very direct and to the point. Very truthful. I enjoy pieces like this. I feel like as a writer, I'm always trying to progress and innovate and find a new way to express something. I get lost in the technicalities. sometimes its good to just write something emotionally raw without all the fancy flashy schemes and analogies. its a perfect outlet.

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I'm over the fact that I'm halfway sober an shit,
so I can't really complain about being broke wit a kid.
Atleast I gotta family now,

YDK · 11-28-2013, 12:12 AM

Leave links I got 4 days off to feed

ill nik-A · 11-28-2013, 06:07 AM

This was cool, solid flow, sounds like ure questioning happiness after having to grow up and deal with life head on, I enjoyed it, simple but effective, cool stuff

Wise Wiggles · 11-28-2013, 10:48 AM

Have some dignity and take the mother of your child out of that avatar slot. Wtf.

11-20-2013, 11:02 PM	#1
YDK ghost in the matrix Join Date: Apr 2013 Location: Covington, KY Posts: 4,563 Battle Record: 14-25 Champed - Art of Writing League (x2) - Lime Green Poetry Association Rep Power: 8181112	yup I just been sitting here trying ta get adjusted, working too much for easy money got me feeling disgusted, taking advantage of situations wit the one I'm in love wit, Ignoring my girl so I can write tal'm bout poetic justice. Damn, an I just got her back, got the woman of my dreams wit my daughter on her lap, an I ain't gonna front I'm fuckin ecstatic for that, so why I'm always stressing Cuz I cant smoke a sack? I'm over the fact that I'm halfway sober an shit, so I can't really complain about being broke wit a kid. Atleast I gotta family now, it took a lot of losses ta bring the man in me out, but I been working every day I gotta plan wit me now, just look at how I'm coping with insanity wow! I used to hate dealing with this, got me feeling like a kid when I'm stealing a kiss. She's passed out on the couch when I'm leaving at 6, But that early in the morning I know she's sleepless as Shit. there ain't much left ta say an even less ta be debated Just know that while I'm working your still appreciated. __________________

11-28-2013, 12:12 AM	#3
YDK ghost in the matrix Join Date: Apr 2013 Location: Covington, KY Posts: 4,563 Battle Record: 14-25 Champed - Art of Writing League (x2) - Lime Green Poetry Association Rep Power: 8181112	Leave links I got 4 days off to feed __________________

11-28-2013, 06:07 AM	#4
ill nik-A Super Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 7,420 Battle Record: 70-25 Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Champed - Battle Arena - BA Picture - Picture Battle Tournament - Netcees Battle League (3x) - Netcees Writers League (2x) - Summer Classic VI - Fall Brawl III - Netcees Battle League Season X - Lyric Olympics Rep Power: 77164519	This was cool, solid flow, sounds like ure questioning happiness after having to grow up and deal with life head on, I enjoyed it, simple but effective, cool stuff __________________ Grumpy old man.

11-28-2013, 10:48 AM	#5
Wise Wiggles nok Su kow Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,505 Battle Record: 1-1 Rep Power: 51788022	Have some dignity and take the mother of your child out of that avatar slot. Wtf. __________________ "black as midnight..black as pitch blacker than the soul of the foulest witch"