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Old 10-08-2013, 01:50 AM   #1
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sporadic at best. photographic arrest, developing sight
paragraphs parasitic to write. the bible mentions me twice
fooled you once. acoustic rhythm taps molecular life
bearskin percussive set in maple. rawhide, stretching it tight
til instrumental delight is something easily played
green serenade. kudzu vine, whip cracks, leafy meringue
minimalistic, semi-consistent, clearly deranged
sentence derivative like collective experience, deleted or saved
believing is pain. peace is the raindrops buzzing at noon
until it reminds us that we've got something to do
sunrise dusky as dew. hustler pursuits in a duster, adieu
i'm off to look for substance to use. to fuck or to screw?
taking life for granted like it's custom for you
while i try to cherish every single lunch i consume
lustful and crude, love is abuse. i've cued a diversion
to discover love is simply what you'll do for a person.
music is purpose, beauty to worship, chiseled in stone
all we ever needed was a picture to hold
impressionistic repose. print still-life digital prose
watch it come alive. then kill itself with a rope
it's sacrificial, it's bone, dynamic socially strained
built an empire in my bedroom just to throw it away
microbial waves. throne in his grave, growth and decay
scribble multiples on multiple pages. but only today
i don't mean to be meaningful. just composing in vain
zirconium blades, open my brain to let neurosis escape
floating parades, globalized like xenophobia, AIDS
Alice's hole was her slavery, now she's holding her Chains
smoking flame, opiate-based, glass-blown bowlful of haze
behaviors trace what biometric coding engrains
total disdain for methodology, dogmatic determinists
chaos captured Copernicus. a field of wrathful conservatives
passing for rational persons, nails scratching the surfaces
soon
there will be blood
better fasten your tourniquets.






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Old 10-08-2013, 01:56 AM   #2
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Favorite verse I've read in a great while. Classic Blacketh..

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Old 10-08-2013, 02:45 PM   #3
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sporadic at best. photographic arrest, developing sight
paragraphs parasitic to write. the bible mentions me twice
fooled you once. acoustic rhythm taps molecular life
bearskin percussive set in maple. rawhide, stretching it tight
til instrumental delight

loved this intro

zirconium blades, open my brain to let neurosis escape
floating parades, globalized like xenophobia, AIDS
Alice's hole was her slavery, now she's holding her Chains
smoking flame, opiate-based, glass-blown bowlful of haze

what ? raw....
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Old 10-08-2013, 07:51 PM   #4
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Old 10-10-2013, 10:39 PM   #5
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Old 10-11-2013, 10:40 AM   #6
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The dead man IS alive. Sup Black.

Just get'n back into action & what better way to gain even more motivation than to stumble upon one of your pieces. The style is impeccable, never gets dull/boring and it's kudos to how you continue to string words together masterfully, drop some dope content and concepts & deliver a well-rounded script.

This started off pretty well but I started geek'n when I got to that middle section all the way down to the end.

music is purpose, beauty to worship, chiseled in stone
all we ever needed was a picture to hold
impressionistic repose. print still-life digital prose
watch it come alive. then kill itself with a rope

^....that last line here was icing on the cake.

zirconium blades, open my brain to let neurosis escape
floating parades, globalized like xenophobia, AIDS
Alice's hole was her slavery, now she's holding her Chains
smoking flame, opiate-based, glass-blown bowlful of haze
behaviors trace what biometric coding engrains

^.... spazz session ignited.


Always a great experience to read your drops, sir. I don't see you in the AOWL this season? Hopefully you get in if you aren't already. Maybe we can collab some time. Great work. Holler.
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Old 10-11-2013, 12:20 PM   #7
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This shit was real dope Black. Ur vocabulary is astounding and very impressive. Always enjoy reading ur work it's so polished and witty. Sometimes the words u use I don't even understand lmao. But yeah thisnwas my fav part

believing is pain. peace is the raindrops buzzing at noon
until it reminds us that we've got something to do
sunrise dusky as dew. hustler pursuits in a duster, adieu
i'm off to look for substance to use. to fuck or to screw?
taking life for granted like it's custom for you
while i try to cherish every single lunch i consume
lustful and crude, love is abuse. i've cued a diversion
to discover love is simply what you'll do for a person.
music is purpose, beauty to worship, chiseled in stone
all we ever needed was a picture to hold

rediculous great drop homie
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Old 10-11-2013, 02:40 PM   #8
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@King Ra. thanks man and i'm taking a few weeks off from the season. just another deadline I can't manage to keep. don't need another one of those in life atm.

thanks sho. good to see you're frequenting this section of the site. stay a while..
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Was this your application essay to the Netcees.com Hall of Fame? That's what it read like, to me. Your writing is as fluid as ever, and the topic was pretty clear to me despite all the metaphors: I was reading a dead man verse about what it's like to read a dead man verse. That sort of topic is cool. This was sort of a self-reflection boast. It's not a reflection of your thoughtfulness as much as your simple ability to rhyme better than most.

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believing is pain. peace is the raindrops buzzing at noon
until it reminds us that we've got something to do
sunrise dusky as dew. hustler pursuits in a duster, adieu
i'm off to look for substance to use. to fuck or to screw?
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Your luminous lexicon, sporadically lascivious and at turns laconic or lavish, is a luxury. I liken your phrashing to a meat starved sex animal tortured at a tibetan monastery for five celibate years (also no burgers) due to STD spreading in the southeastern U.S., namely alabama. Your extreme foundation of murdering mundane miscreants maliciously makes more mayhem mature. Alliteration is LOL but honestly McDonalds breakfast w/ mild picante sauce? Almost as delicious as the dish served via pixels by blacketh the caucasian paradox.
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