Deep In My Cellar

Mr. J · 10-07-2013, 08:04 PM

I seize eyes from the tiger, take lies from the liar
set their ice in the fire..fan that, advice from the wiser
of men...of mice time is of the dire, the likes of a tire
formed to a bike and it's rider, roll the dice you acquire
once I add the clock, and the other device to the wires
it's on you...give your wine to the diner
outsource, when you understand the lines of the finer...
evils, you might find out that time is the buyer
I am the seller, the keeper of the message
you should either go to sleep with depressants
or understand the weaker is in my presence
the sweetest of essence...waiting
and I, keep them buried deep in my collection
playing with them til' I deem my impressions
are you ready? or even seasoned to perfection?
I doubt it, branch out then weed out connections...
rooted deep in your mind, leave out direction...
I snap them out from what they were buried in
draw out everything that they carried in
voodoo spells...raise everything where the cemetary ends
farfetched, funny because they still ain't made any sense
youthful in their actions, reckless, alive in my absence
would probably die in contraction
if I never supplied them an attic
spewing hope...the lies of an addict
I let them whine though...they strive from the passion

Just Write · 10-07-2013, 11:00 PM

and I, keep them buried deep in my collection
playing with them til' I deem my impressions
are you ready? or even seasoned to perfection?
I doubt it, branch out then weed out connections...
rooted deep in your mind, leave out directions

this was dope, had some stand out lines. beginning got sort of monotonous for the first 5 or 6 lines then picked right up. dig your style man, above was my favorite. peace

beegee · 10-08-2013, 02:58 PM

I am the seller, the keeper of the message
you should either go to sleep with depressants
or understand the weaker is in my presence

these bars def jumped out at me.
real good piece.
never lost the flow.

Mr. J · 10-08-2013, 04:12 PM

Thanx breh

Eŋg · 10-08-2013, 09:01 PM

doggerel, tbh.

Mr. J · 10-09-2013, 06:59 PM

Like all things it depends on taste

unless you sniffle too much

Eŋg · 10-09-2013, 08:05 PM

delete your post and take another day to craft a comeback, again. make it better this time.

I am the seller, the keeper of the message
you should either go to sleep with depressants
or understand the weaker is in my presence
the sweetest of essence...waiting
and I, keep them buried deep in my collection
playing with them til' I deem my impressions
are you ready? or even seasoned to perfection?
I doubt it, branch out then weed out connections...
rooted deep in your mind, leave out direction...

this was like, the peak of all sections. or something. it was super fresh and the cohesion like the way the rhymes like matched up perfectly - ooooooOOOOooooh, let's tessellate (not me and you, i'm paraphrasing) - really made me sit and contemplate life. a bit. got dem feels, tbh. i prefer the colder climate, got that Inuit bloodline/reading your verse with ennui. laughing. world kinda quiet, tho. not laughing.

Mr. J · 10-09-2013, 08:24 PM

You can't bump a piece when you already said something

to think I'm infatuated with you is cute
.
.but seen before

Inno · 10-09-2013, 08:39 PM

godam that first line was so fucking simple but jesus did that shit pack a fucking impact lol dope shit man you definitely start this off on the right foot. dope fucking flow to tbh...thse types of pieces are cool...feel like they are useless tho lol..not pointing to your piece just felt like sharing that. def digging the swag and dam near perfect flow this had...keep posting man

Quote:

I seize eyes from the tiger, take lies from the liar

this was hot fire sauce dopeness

Dope girl · 10-09-2013, 08:54 PM

Very good piece of work, you flowed well.

e11even · 10-09-2013, 11:55 PM

"once I add the clock, and the other device to the wires
it's on you...give your wine to the diner
outsource, when you understand the lines of the finer...
evils, you might find out that time is the buyer

playing with them til' I deem my impressions
are you ready? or even seasoned to perfection?
I doubt it, branch out then weed out connections...
rooted deep in your mind, leave out direction..."

This is my fave out of the stuff I read from you. This was pretty damn dope. I like your abstract way of shit talk and cloaked bragging. Tighter than my style and very concise in delivery. Fresh in my book. Good shit Mr. Harley Quinn.

Sho Money EMG · 10-11-2013, 12:24 PM

This was not good man. U got nerve to critique me and then drop this. Big let down. With ur standards I thought you'd b Hella dope. But this was just a bunch of forced rhymes thrown together that don't make sense

Wise Wiggles · 10-11-2013, 12:40 PM

Gamble shut the fuck up pussy. Your rhymes are the definition of forced.

Mr. J · 10-11-2013, 05:36 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Shogun Dinero

This was not good man. U got nerve to critique me and then drop this. Big let down. With ur standards I thought you'd b Hella dope. But this was just a bunch of forced rhymes thrown together that don't make sense

You remind me of these other fanatics on my coat tail

Sho Money EMG · 10-11-2013, 05:55 PM

Lmfao u wish homie

Mr. J · 10-11-2013, 05:56 PM

I made you return here just as I did the other...

keep falling for the mousetrap and think I have interest in shedding light on you

Sho Money EMG · 10-11-2013, 10:11 PM

Alright u know what..that was wrong of me to act like that becuz that's what u did to me.. Here's my honest opinion...

I really do think it lacks as far as it's message and some syllables in the multies didn't connect but.... It has alot of potential I can def tell ur a skilled writer... Just need to work on polishing it up a bit, sometimes I felt that I couldn't find the flow cuz of the rhyme scheme.. But honestly u def had some good lines.. Just felt some stuff didn't make sense or maybe just I didn't understand.. This was my fav

I am the seller, the keeper of the message
you should either go to sleep with depressants
or understand the weaker is in my presence
the sweetest of essence...waiting
and I, keep them buried deep in my collection
playing with them til' I deem my impressions
are you ready? or even seasoned to perfection?
I doubt it, branch out then weed out connections...
rooted deep in your mind, leave out direction...
I snap them out from what they were buried in

this was tight just thought the wording was a bit odd.. Keep droppin man and plz next time leave good feed

Ghost1 · 10-11-2013, 10:44 PM

Wat a stupid faggot.

The piece was cool...opening segment was more enthralling imo....neat stuff.

Sho Money EMG · 10-11-2013, 11:33 PM

I'm just tryna be the bigger man

Zen · 10-11-2013, 11:57 PM

Mr J's dope.

10-07-2013, 08:04 PM	#1
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	Deep In My Cellar I seize eyes from the tiger, take lies from the liar set their ice in the fire..fan that, advice from the wiser of men...of mice time is of the dire, the likes of a tire formed to a bike and it's rider, roll the dice you acquire once I add the clock, and the other device to the wires it's on you...give your wine to the diner outsource, when you understand the lines of the finer... evils, you might find out that time is the buyer I am the seller, the keeper of the message you should either go to sleep with depressants or understand the weaker is in my presence the sweetest of essence...waiting and I, keep them buried deep in my collection playing with them til' I deem my impressions are you ready? or even seasoned to perfection? I doubt it, branch out then weed out connections... rooted deep in your mind, leave out direction... I snap them out from what they were buried in draw out everything that they carried in voodoo spells...raise everything where the cemetary ends farfetched, funny because they still ain't made any sense youthful in their actions, reckless, alive in my absence would probably die in contraction if I never supplied them an attic spewing hope...the lies of an addict I let them whine though...they strive from the passion __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

10-07-2013, 11:00 PM	#2
Just Write Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 1,709 Battle Record: 9-12 Rep Power: 4997617	and I, keep them buried deep in my collection playing with them til' I deem my impressions are you ready? or even seasoned to perfection? I doubt it, branch out then weed out connections... rooted deep in your mind, leave out directions this was dope, had some stand out lines. beginning got sort of monotonous for the first 5 or 6 lines then picked right up. dig your style man, above was my favorite. peace __________________

10-08-2013, 04:12 PM	#4
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	Thanx breh __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

10-09-2013, 06:59 PM	#6
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	Like all things it depends on taste unless you sniffle too much __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

10-09-2013, 08:24 PM	#8
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	You can't bump a piece when you already said something to think I'm infatuated with you is cute . .but seen before __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

10-08-2013, 02:58 PM	#3
beegee Member Join Date: Sep 2013 Posts: 32 Rep Power: 0	I am the seller, the keeper of the message you should either go to sleep with depressants or understand the weaker is in my presence these bars def jumped out at me. real good piece. never lost the flow.

10-08-2013, 09:01 PM	#5
Eŋg rhyme capsule. Join Date: Sep 2018 Posts: 2,150 Rep Power: 0	doggerel, tbh.

10-09-2013, 08:05 PM	#7
Eŋg rhyme capsule. Join Date: Sep 2018 Posts: 2,150 Rep Power: 0	delete your post and take another day to craft a comeback, again. make it better this time. I am the seller, the keeper of the message you should either go to sleep with depressants or understand the weaker is in my presence the sweetest of essence...waiting and I, keep them buried deep in my collection playing with them til' I deem my impressions are you ready? or even seasoned to perfection? I doubt it, branch out then weed out connections... rooted deep in your mind, leave out direction... this was like, the peak of all sections. or something. it was super fresh and the cohesion like the way the rhymes like matched up perfectly - ooooooOOOOooooh, let's tessellate (not me and you, i'm paraphrasing) - really made me sit and contemplate life. a bit. got dem feels, tbh. i prefer the colder climate, got that Inuit bloodline/reading your verse with ennui. laughing. world kinda quiet, tho. not laughing.

10-09-2013, 08:54 PM	#10
Dope girl Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: I live in Florida Posts: 4,788 Battle Record: 3-8 Rep Power: 55521419	Very good piece of work, you flowed well.

10-09-2013, 11:55 PM	#11
e11even V.V Join Date: Sep 2013 Location: . Posts: 2,076 Battle Record: 31-20 Rep Power: 6247259	"once I add the clock, and the other device to the wires it's on you...give your wine to the diner outsource, when you understand the lines of the finer... evils, you might find out that time is the buyer playing with them til' I deem my impressions are you ready? or even seasoned to perfection? I doubt it, branch out then weed out connections... rooted deep in your mind, leave out direction..." This is my fave out of the stuff I read from you. This was pretty damn dope. I like your abstract way of shit talk and cloaked bragging. Tighter than my style and very concise in delivery. Fresh in my book. Good shit Mr. Harley Quinn. __________________ Ahem.

10-11-2013, 12:24 PM	#12
Sho Money EMG Senior Member Join Date: May 2013 Location: Zooyork Posts: 2,124 Battle Record: 7-12 Rep Power: 0	This was not good man. U got nerve to critique me and then drop this. Big let down. With ur standards I thought you'd b Hella dope. But this was just a bunch of forced rhymes thrown together that don't make sense __________________ Sho Money \| Camp Bell Team Alpha EMG This site is whack

10-11-2013, 12:40 PM	#13
Wise Wiggles nok Su kow Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,505 Battle Record: 1-1 Rep Power: 51788022	Gamble shut the fuck up pussy. Your rhymes are the definition of forced. __________________ "black as midnight..black as pitch blacker than the soul of the foulest witch"

10-11-2013, 05:55 PM	#15
Sho Money EMG Senior Member Join Date: May 2013 Location: Zooyork Posts: 2,124 Battle Record: 7-12 Rep Power: 0	Lmfao u wish homie __________________ Sho Money \| Camp Bell Team Alpha EMG This site is whack

10-11-2013, 05:56 PM	#16
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	I made you return here just as I did the other... keep falling for the mousetrap and think I have interest in shedding light on you __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

10-11-2013, 10:11 PM	#17
Sho Money EMG Senior Member Join Date: May 2013 Location: Zooyork Posts: 2,124 Battle Record: 7-12 Rep Power: 0	Alright u know what..that was wrong of me to act like that becuz that's what u did to me.. Here's my honest opinion... I really do think it lacks as far as it's message and some syllables in the multies didn't connect but.... It has alot of potential I can def tell ur a skilled writer... Just need to work on polishing it up a bit, sometimes I felt that I couldn't find the flow cuz of the rhyme scheme.. But honestly u def had some good lines.. Just felt some stuff didn't make sense or maybe just I didn't understand.. This was my fav I am the seller, the keeper of the message you should either go to sleep with depressants or understand the weaker is in my presence the sweetest of essence...waiting and I, keep them buried deep in my collection playing with them til' I deem my impressions are you ready? or even seasoned to perfection? I doubt it, branch out then weed out connections... rooted deep in your mind, leave out direction... I snap them out from what they were buried in this was tight just thought the wording was a bit odd.. Keep droppin man and plz next time leave good feed __________________ Sho Money \| Camp Bell Team Alpha EMG This site is whack

10-11-2013, 11:33 PM	#19
Sho Money EMG Senior Member Join Date: May 2013 Location: Zooyork Posts: 2,124 Battle Record: 7-12 Rep Power: 0	I'm just tryna be the bigger man __________________ Sho Money \| Camp Bell Team Alpha EMG This site is whack

10-11-2013, 11:57 PM	#20
Zen Arm the Homeless Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,102 Battle Record: 22-24 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 35079722	Mr J's dope.