Dye, Bitch.

e11even · 09-22-2013, 06:39 AM

In this vehicle I treat a one-way like a runway- but I ain’t a model for shit…
I’ll take off on a tan gent,
but it doesn’t mean I just ramble for kicks.
I mean, i could Rambo with kicks,
but like kendo I’d stick, split a man-boob for shits,
Giggles, and chips, ram boos wit dick
til she throws up & spews my damn splooge n then…
Ummm… don’t really know wat comes next if she won't jam u again…

But the colors of character are painted everytime we're brushed wrong.
Remind me of prostitutes when these hoes converse
with this dick hopin they don’t get dumped on.
Sort of hilarious how hordes of these characters
indulge in the porns of this caliber,
confused as if this view was adorned by an amateur.
Bitch!!! If these horns were to come after ya,
the aftermath of the massacre
wud be televised completely in red… not only the matador.
Peasants only get a seat at the tables of the chosen AFTER lords.
So what color is ur flesh askin for if u bask in fabricated facts galore,
simply cloaking ur act, as its wack n' whored?

Green-- That of the greed inside.
when controllers of destiny collide,
power invested in me's realized,
and will does just so till ur coward-ly demise.

trimming of kings rim my inner lining.
gold undergarments that provide garnish
im told my soul could harness til its boldly shining.
a bloodline torn between the stories told and the diamonds its mining.
im aware of white dilution pollutin the intertwining
of my perception of life and the tone selection i'm rhyming.

So, if u color me flawed, you can dye, bitch.
Each iris defies what each mind would imply,since
The lines that design this are not the times that resigned them.
Which means, I, of a kind not defined by your liking,
Need not be tried, as a trial would be sign that I'm lying.

CopyPat · 09-23-2013, 01:34 AM

interesting... its pretty original as far as the content.. u had some cool schemes here and there. u obviously can rhyme.. it seems u don't take alot of time with it though.. keeping with the color theme ur very green in that sense.. the raw talent is there but its not polished at all... read dudes like dead man to get an idea of what i mean by that... its just way more smooth.. ur a little all over the place and the flow kinda fluctuates.. theres not alot of fluidity to it. you'll get better, i like that ur willing to fuck with different rhymes though so just keep writing, posting, stay active in cypher that will help with getting out ur urges to just flow quick shit, and especially keep reading/feeding cause theres TONS a dope ppl in here

e11even · 09-23-2013, 02:13 AM

thanks Pat. I'll definitely do that.

09-22-2013, 06:39 AM	#1
e11even V.V Join Date: Sep 2013 Location: . Posts: 2,076 Battle Record: 31-20 Rep Power: 6247259	Dye, Bitch. In this vehicle I treat a one-way like a runway- but I ain’t a model for shit… I’ll take off on a tan gent, but it doesn’t mean I just ramble for kicks. I mean, i could Rambo with kicks, but like kendo I’d stick, split a man-boob for shits, Giggles, and chips, ram boos wit dick til she throws up & spews my damn splooge n then… Ummm… don’t really know wat comes next if she won't jam u again… But the colors of character are painted everytime we're brushed wrong. Remind me of prostitutes when these hoes converse with this dick hopin they don’t get dumped on. Sort of hilarious how hordes of these characters indulge in the porns of this caliber, confused as if this view was adorned by an amateur. Bitch!!! If these horns were to come after ya, the aftermath of the massacre wud be televised completely in red… not only the matador. Peasants only get a seat at the tables of the chosen AFTER lords. So what color is ur flesh askin for if u bask in fabricated facts galore, simply cloaking ur act, as its wack n' whored? Green-- That of the greed inside. when controllers of destiny collide, power invested in me's realized, and will does just so till ur coward-ly demise. trimming of kings rim my inner lining. gold undergarments that provide garnish im told my soul could harness til its boldly shining. a bloodline torn between the stories told and the diamonds its mining. im aware of white dilution pollutin the intertwining of my perception of life and the tone selection i'm rhyming. So, if u color me flawed, you can dye, bitch. Each iris defies what each mind would imply,since The lines that design this are not the times that resigned them. Which means, I, of a kind not defined by your liking, Need not be tried, as a trial would be sign that I'm lying. __________________ Ahem.

09-23-2013, 01:34 AM	#2
CopyPat Mic Check Join Date: Mar 2013 Location: Calgary Alberta Canada Posts: 708 Battle Record: 13-10 Rep Power: 3742225	interesting... its pretty original as far as the content.. u had some cool schemes here and there. u obviously can rhyme.. it seems u don't take alot of time with it though.. keeping with the color theme ur very green in that sense.. the raw talent is there but its not polished at all... read dudes like dead man to get an idea of what i mean by that... its just way more smooth.. ur a little all over the place and the flow kinda fluctuates.. theres not alot of fluidity to it. you'll get better, i like that ur willing to fuck with different rhymes though so just keep writing, posting, stay active in cypher that will help with getting out ur urges to just flow quick shit, and especially keep reading/feeding cause theres TONS a dope ppl in here __________________ My syllable count approximately a billion, bounce. You cannot compete.

09-23-2013, 02:13 AM	#3
e11even V.V Join Date: Sep 2013 Location: . Posts: 2,076 Battle Record: 31-20 Rep Power: 6247259	thanks Pat. I'll definitely do that. __________________ Ahem.