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Old 10-16-2024, 10:16 AM   #1
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I remember you...

I'm running dry in a firery vessel where writing seems empty
Coming from the sky, with each diary entry I die on re-entry
No point slinging bows and arrows if the target isn't free
I'll kill you with a handmade quiver like Parkinsons disease
I preach Greek mythology, I'm not even playing a little bit
Now I read Icarus like a Chinese citizen saying ridiculous
We all just prey like religion in the vein of a physicist
Racist isn't it? They think we're animals anyway fucking hypocrites
White folks are ni**er rich, buying gold's inconsiderate
I got a question; Can YOU find the wolves in this picture? Shit...
I deal in cold hard arithmetic, the problem's that you looked
Donald's last view should've been a bullet from Thomas Matthew Crooks
But the assassin shook, one inch and that boy was a legend
Like a championship match that's the point of contention
Avoided all mentions of my movies to return to my roots
Where odd journies ensue with topical tournies to boot
A shoe-in as a challenger, a focused gait's nothing new
Detest all of you with every fiber like how Ocean Gate's sub was glued
You don't care about the readers, you care about who sees the views
Caught in feedback loops like FEMA groups when their fee's recouped
Disaster relief season 2, if you want quotes you can read...
Holla at ya buoy like that girl in Jaws opening scene
I'm OG, please don't approach me with a meme or emoji
You wouldn't amount to a hill of Beans if you were Gigi and Kobe
Most bottom-feeding rookies have top heavy prose
It's toppling homes, but throw heavy shade an-a-moss-city grows...
I decode the cryptic message and stowed it in a crypt
Filing emotion to dismiss like remaining stoic when you're pissed
It's rote by design like a blueprint, human nature's surreal
Won't have to go out on a limb to prove I laid waist to the field
Like the Black Dahlia, in Short that blurry mug's ideal
I'm so emotive I could get convicted by a jury of my peers
It's the allure of appeal, I'm a bastard in hiding
If you feeling a little froggy, jump... that's a tad polarizing
I've taken more flak than a world war 2 bomber pilot has
A crisis actor after a violent act lurks behind this mask
Interpret that on my behalf, I'm killing time with spells
Still beside myself like mass produced pills that line a shelf
I'm the bay harbor butcher, you probably see some lame farmer
I'll carve your heart, bet it steel greaves like a piece of leg armor
Take my word, prejudice is built from fear and threats
It appears you're deaf, if you think I'm a xenophobe you should hear my ex...
Bid Mick 'Foley adieu', alter egos are hard to respect
Like Arthur Fleck's, the only thing they got are-their-flex
You have no agency here, need CGI scene effects...
To accept the screen actor's guild like Jason Momoa on DC sets
Here to collect, getting out of debt is awfully rare
Guess you'll have two-fine-aunts like the Fresh Prince of Bel-Air
Call it a career 'til a doctor heals your ass
Medicaid's just a bigger gravedigger... I got a pilfer that
So soused spittle fell in some profound wishin' well
Only way I'm done gin is in an underground prison cell
I'm harboring grudges, watch me keep you haters at bay
If that's what you "callin' eyes" you should see me in native 4k
Take a leave for days, there's no ETA of my seedy ways
I'm getting more blowback than a speedy case by the DEA
Go medieval on you hacks, every bar buries in blades
All theories I state have taken Hold like Barbarian raids
It's strange but 'some marauder'... wandering the wasteland...
Bound to disappear into thin air like mountain climbers at basecamp
Make boundless strides, it's a sign confessions are now vital
Like a polygraph, I have no connection with outliers
Read beyond the lines, I'm too hard up to drop a dime
Odd sometimes I'm flushed with cash like narcotics when cops arrive
Ya girl rank and file, bring a-tally-in, unlawfully sequestered
My girl in the spa getting wetter watching spaghetti westerns
Love when ass be ripplin', it's just more padding nitwit
After every fight I get another fatty's digits, Paddy Pimblett
Ahead for Milennia like ex-presidents, so take a knee
It's nothing to sneeze at, leave it to Generation Z to generate disease
I see the future, they ask me how I know the deal before
Details surely? Female herpes... I'll never reveal my sores
Nothing's sacred anymore, leaking stuff is the norm
Hurricane cleanups in Florida, they leave n' summon the storm
Galaxy restored, if there's a milky way I'm bound to report it
My abs orbit my solar plexus, that's how I absorb it
I'm Holier than thou... sand bars drowning this horseshit
A caveat is a cave at odds with ground that supports it
The means justify the end, I'm not proud to endorse this
Unfortunate, I came back and said nothing profoundly important...

For now.

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Old 10-17-2024, 10:54 AM   #2
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I'll kill you with a handmade quiver like Parkinsons disease
maybe

You wouldn't amount to a hill of Beans if you were Gigi and Kobe
WTF dude?


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Old 10-19-2024, 05:44 PM   #3
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Old 10-27-2024, 07:19 PM   #4
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like...like...like...like...like...like

& then when you choose to omit it, its lines like this

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I see the future, they ask me how I know the deal before
Details surely? Female herpes... I'll never reveal my sores
whack.

tired formulaic bollocks tbh.

the setups are bunk aswell "im not even played a little bit". great.

i actually thought some of the wordplay - if not the execution - the thought behind them, were pretty creative, genuinely.
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