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Somebody come and save these people.
I'm driftin'. They steady tryna stop my progress. Their hate, it kinda brings me solace. Does somebody wanna take the wheel? I really don't know who's drivin. I really don't know who's real. I really don't know who's conscious. I'm really just down here vibin. Been failing but I'll keep on tryin. Been sailing but I keep on sinkin. I'm tryna know just what they thinkin. They're hatin and I know the reason.... I'm hoping I don't fall this season. Left behind guess I'll catch you on the flip side. I'm thinkin They gon drown me in the riptide. I'm synced in, I'm sinkin, I'm linked in, tell me am I dreamin? Tell God come and save his people. They never could be my equal. My pure soul don't see no evil. Who's dreamin? I'm driftin. If their sleepin, tell me why I'm dreamin. The moons there just watching man fall. Does the universe even care at all. I'm driftin, if their dreamin, tell me why I'm sleepin. The moons there just watching man fall. Does the universe even care at all. Somebody come and save these people. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LOz4...7g5fpe1YwQzH9K |
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Tryna improve my song writing.
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I'm really just down here vibin.
Been failing but I'll keep on tryin. ^relatable af and I think that'll hit a lot of people, great with something easy to catch on to on the first listen Also liked this part considering the content matter and where you take your story and draw substance towards: Who's dreamin? I'm driftin. If their sleepin, tell me why I'm dreamin. A tip, you can embed videos like this: Code:
Overall I think you got great potential with song writing and is already well along the way skill-wise. In terms of complete works this may be the best I've read from you. It has depth that's both relatable and easy to get at first listen. Keep at it, you may go somewhere with this shit if you don't give up and believe in yourself. Give 0 fucks what the haters are thinking or trying to do. Most people drown in riptides because they fight too much against the current instead of just floating with it and swimming in an angle towards shore and safety before they're too far out and need help. Didn't know you did audios and in a style very different from anything else I've heard on this site. Dope. Are you the one doing the vocals or someone else? Good voice
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I did the vocals. Yes. Thanks, I appreciate your feedback. Especially since I'm a fan! Haha. This is one of my favorites I've done. I'd say top 3 top 5. I've been struggling learning to make verses as far as transition.
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Ooooh. It works! Haha. Thanks.
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Damn, didn't realize using the code tag ended up showing it like that, my b. Seems like you figured it out tho, good shit
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