Fancy Clown

Problumatic · 01-25-2018, 06:20 PM

on the low you had hurt me, you were family to me/
So every time I'm staring at you, can't manage to speak/
sit in the winners circle? Or stand in defeat?/
the damage is deep...what's there even left to say?/
Focused on my issues, I get drunk, stare n' gaze/
I get numb, careless waste/
mindless drugs, share the taste/
Ride a buzz, try to bluff, size it up fair n' straight/
Let you treat me like a fancy clown, treat me like a hand me down, hoping I forget, by the sec you pull them panties down/
you had all me hyped up! While Thinking that you can be down/
I was lying to myself cause you were lying to me/
Knowin' you stand me up, so why you lying with me?/
Had me drunk off ya love now I'm buying ya weed/
Shitt..I'll never make that mistake again/
Savor this hate within, taking a taste of gin/
...
Be patient with me - potential's my greatest catch/
If I don't I catch greatness, potential's their greatest laugh/
I got 21 questions, I need none of em' answered/
How you "shuffle" thru responses, you becoming a dancer/
Tell you the truth man..this becoming the standard/
I'm "the rapper"..that explains why she done with the "chances"/

Eŋg · 03-04-2018, 10:14 PM

this was decent. sorry you were slept on.

Geno · 03-06-2018, 06:57 AM

Enjoyed

Concrete · 03-09-2018, 09:34 AM

Perhaps a bit cliche topic, and some uneventful lines, still you show you have the capacity to craft some effective bars to down. I like the simple n direct format, like "I get numb, careless waste/mindless drugs, share the taste" - less is more and so on. Could perhaps been polished a bit more but still a nice lil read.

01-25-2018, 06:20 PM	#1
Problumatic Member Join Date: Jan 2018 Posts: 79 Battle Record: 0-1 Rep Power: 6797934	Fancy Clown on the low you had hurt me, you were family to me/ So every time I'm staring at you, can't manage to speak/ sit in the winners circle? Or stand in defeat?/ the damage is deep...what's there even left to say?/ Focused on my issues, I get drunk, stare n' gaze/ I get numb, careless waste/ mindless drugs, share the taste/ Ride a buzz, try to bluff, size it up fair n' straight/ Let you treat me like a fancy clown, treat me like a hand me down, hoping I forget, by the sec you pull them panties down/ you had all me hyped up! While Thinking that you can be down/ I was lying to myself cause you were lying to me/ Knowin' you stand me up, so why you lying with me?/ Had me drunk off ya love now I'm buying ya weed/ Shitt..I'll never make that mistake again/ Savor this hate within, taking a taste of gin/ ... Be patient with me - potential's my greatest catch/ If I don't I catch greatness, potential's their greatest laugh/ I got 21 questions, I need none of em' answered/ How you "shuffle" thru responses, you becoming a dancer/ Tell you the truth man..this becoming the standard/ I'm "the rapper"..that explains why she done with the "chances"/

03-06-2018, 06:57 AM	#3
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,354 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036761	Enjoyed __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est*

03-04-2018, 10:14 PM	#2
Eŋg rhyme capsule. Join Date: Sep 2018 Posts: 2,150 Rep Power: 0	this was decent. sorry you were slept on.

03-09-2018, 09:34 AM	#4
Concrete Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2013 Location: Oslo Posts: 179 Battle Record: 5-0 Rep Power: 2158978	Perhaps a bit cliche topic, and some uneventful lines, still you show you have the capacity to craft some effective bars to down. I like the simple n direct format, like "I get numb, careless waste/mindless drugs, share the taste" - less is more and so on. Could perhaps been polished a bit more but still a nice lil read.