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YDK · 12-15-2015, 05:16 AM

Check it out

Greed · 12-15-2015, 05:33 AM

Poor quality. Lacks the emotion that is implied.

YDK · 12-15-2015, 05:34 AM

Yeah, recorded it about an hour ago while everybody was sleepin so I tried bein quiet but I guess it's pretty clear huh lol

Nameflip · 12-15-2015, 06:11 AM

Flows wack as fuck bro.

You're reading it. Not feeling it.

dead man · 12-15-2015, 07:20 AM

fuck everybody above me.

this was profoundly sad imo. if one has ever lost somebody close to them and called their number just to hear their voicemail message then they may not really understand. it's a weird kind of grieving process. clinging on to the small things that make them seem alive. it's selfish and immature but for just one moment, it helps.

really, really liked this beat as well. but i also like the original song. your content was perfect for this.

yeah, your basic rapping skills aren't the best on this. your flow was rushed and a bit monotone, and i wasnt even particularly a fan of how you wrote some of your lines, but ill be damned if i didn't feel the content.

thanks.

Greed · 12-15-2015, 12:52 PM

Dead man is nurturing.

We are here to tell you give your mom a proper tribute and do this the best you possibly can. No short cuts.

Diode · 12-15-2015, 01:01 PM

why did i think ydk was black?

YDK · 12-15-2015, 02:55 PM

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Originally Posted by Diode

why did i think ydk was black?

Cuz my kids are

An thanks for the views guys I wanna do it better but this is wats done as of now

Aero · 12-15-2015, 03:21 PM

This was awful I had to turn off after 29 secs. Is that your mom though? Sorry to hear about that man. Props on doing this for her.

Fracture · 12-15-2015, 03:33 PM

This was a great concept. And it was even set up nice

Your voice is fucked but there's some serious producing skills

BROKE LESNAR · 12-15-2015, 04:01 PM

This was dope, man. You're a great guy for doing this and raising awareness. Really creative and well thought out. Loved your voice. Can't wait to watch the video later when I get home.

Ghost1 · 12-15-2015, 04:03 PM

Lmao

Adonis · 12-15-2015, 04:25 PM

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Originally Posted by YDK

Check it out

Can you do me a favor and drop a vote in AOWL please? I'll return favor if you mention me for some feed or something.

Edit: will give feed on this in a bit.

Adonis · 12-15-2015, 06:46 PM

Heart felt. Inconsistent flow to say the least, adlibs might mask it, but still off. Shouting out someone's number sort of weird, sorry bout the loss. It's toughest for me to write about personal shit, but I can, so I commend you. Decent production, but lacking in many areas. Play back value. Good shit though, respect

Thanks for the vote

Objective · 12-15-2015, 07:04 PM

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Originally Posted by BROKE LESNAR

This was dope, man. You're a great guy for doing this and raising awareness. Really creative and well thought out. Loved your voice. Can't wait to watch the video later when I get home.

Agreed. Love the heartfelt lyrics, this is real af to me. (Haven't lost a parent yet though but I can sympathize and can't imagine how I'll take it when it happens.) It's hard enough to rap lyrics like these no matter what level you're at so pulling it off is great. There could be some improvements here and there but it didn't detract from the lyrics and message you bring forth in it imho. You got my respect for doing this.

Frank · 12-17-2015, 01:36 AM

Reminded me of this old school cat name Bubba Sparxxs. Check.him.out, emulate that man and apply your poetry. Looking forward to hearing what you can come up with

YDK · 12-17-2015, 10:37 PM

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Originally Posted by Frank

Reminded me of this old school cat name Bubba Sparxxs. Check.him.out, emulate that man and apply your poetry. Looking forward to hearing what you can come up with

Lol deliverance was the shit when it came out

12-15-2015, 05:34 AM	#3
YDK ghost in the matrix Join Date: Apr 2013 Location: Covington, KY Posts: 4,563 Battle Record: 14-25 Champed - Art of Writing League (x2) - Lime Green Poetry Association Rep Power: 8181113	Yeah, recorded it about an hour ago while everybody was sleepin so I tried bein quiet but I guess it's pretty clear huh lol __________________

12-15-2015, 07:20 AM	#5
dead man living Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 3,485 Battle Record: 33-18 Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Champed - AOWL Season 1 - Art of Writing League - AOWL Season 4 - Write Week V - GWL Season 1 Rep Power: 77606679	fuck everybody above me. this was profoundly sad imo. if one has ever lost somebody close to them and called their number just to hear their voicemail message then they may not really understand. it's a weird kind of grieving process. clinging on to the small things that make them seem alive. it's selfish and immature but for just one moment, it helps. really, really liked this beat as well. but i also like the original song. your content was perfect for this. yeah, your basic rapping skills aren't the best on this. your flow was rushed and a bit monotone, and i wasnt even particularly a fan of how you wrote some of your lines, but ill be damned if i didn't feel the content. thanks. __________________ Zack Wicks for president

12-15-2015, 01:01 PM	#7
Diode PR's Finest Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 14,165 Battle Record: 12-7 Rep Power: 85899410	why did i think ydk was black? __________________

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Aero GOAT Join Date: Jul 2015 Posts: 4,826 Battle Record: 14-17 Champed - Site Diss Competition - Tag Tournament III - Lyric Olympics - Tag Tournament: "Omicron Variant" Rep Power: 0	This was awful I had to turn off after 29 secs. Is that your mom though? Sorry to hear about that man. Props on doing this for her. __________________ Too Rich IRL to Be Here. I'm Out.

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Adonis Tsk Tsk Join Date: Feb 2013 Location: Beer Goggles Posts: 4,834 Battle Record: 36-34 Champed - Lime Green Poetry Association - NFL Pick'em 2016-17 Rep Power: 9946449	Heart felt. Inconsistent flow to say the least, adlibs might mask it, but still off. Shouting out someone's number sort of weird, sorry bout the loss. It's toughest for me to write about personal shit, but I can, so I commend you. Decent production, but lacking in many areas. Play back value. Good shit though, respect Thanks for the vote __________________ I'm tryna fuck like A-don-is TUPAC SHAKUR

12-15-2015, 05:33 AM	#2
Greed Raw Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 1,721 Battle Record: 21-40 Rep Power: 29975687	Poor quality. Lacks the emotion that is implied.

12-15-2015, 06:11 AM	#4
Nameflip I contribute nothing here Join Date: Sep 2015 Posts: 352 Battle Record: 1-6 Rep Power: 3679436	Flows wack as fuck bro. You're reading it. Not feeling it.

12-15-2015, 12:52 PM	#6
Greed Raw Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 1,721 Battle Record: 21-40 Rep Power: 29975687	Dead man is nurturing. We are here to tell you give your mom a proper tribute and do this the best you possibly can. No short cuts.

12-15-2015, 03:33 PM	#10
Fracture Senior Member Join Date: Nov 2015 Posts: 1,118 Battle Record: 9-2 Rep Power: 10222953	This was a great concept. And it was even set up nice Your voice is fucked but there's some serious producing skills

12-15-2015, 04:01 PM	#11
BROKE LESNAR βгοкε ㄴεςηαг Join Date: Jun 2013 Posts: 2,245 Battle Record: 9-4 Champed - 1-2 Punch League Rep Power: 12760964	This was dope, man. You're a great guy for doing this and raising awareness. Really creative and well thought out. Loved your voice. Can't wait to watch the video later when I get home.

12-17-2015, 01:36 AM	#16
Frank Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2001 Posts: 3,228 Champed - NWL Season 2 - Art of Writing League (5x) - Lime Green Poetry Association - AOWL Season 6 - AOWL Season 10 Rep Power: 3853347	Reminded me of this old school cat name Bubba Sparxxs. Check.him.out, emulate that man and apply your poetry. Looking forward to hearing what you can come up with __________________ *VETWORK*