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Old 07-14-2015, 06:53 AM   #1
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booty booty booty booty rockin everywhere
usually I'm doin booties with my cock cuz I don't care
about AIDS, herpes, syphilis, shit none of that
just gimme a jimmy and henny n I'll get under that
see bitches be hittin me up cuz I'm number one in rap
so I'm following the loudest HO! like a fuckin Thundercat
most of yall are rookies who don't know what to do with booty
try to get up in there and freeze like "eew, it's poopy!"
when I hear that shit, I just be like "you weenies"
cuz I'm unlockin boxes like I was Houdini
I give a booty a couple pumps until I just have to bust
roll over and go to bed like "yeah bitch, that's wassup"
they love me cuz I'm a thug see, check the gat I touch
so I put in minimum effort for the gluteus maximus
yall would see this is the truf if only you knew me
until then, stay thirsty friends...
and don't forget to do booties
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Old 07-14-2015, 07:26 AM   #2
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LMAO IT'S INSANE HOW YOU CAN GET ALL PHILOSOPHICAL ON SOME SHIT THEN TURN AROUND AND DROP THIS

Weirdly, I fucking enjoyed it. I had a Thundercats HO! line but its different to this, something about "fisting a HO! like Lion-O" or something terrible lol

unlocking boxes was cool

i liked miminal effort/gluteus maximus too for what its worth


def different but real enjoyable hahahah

keep that pen moving!
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Old 07-14-2015, 07:45 AM   #3
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Reading this is like entering a time machine taking you 10-15 years back in time making you realize everything wasn't better in the past, and a reminder that you change mentality over the years. If it continues at this rate I might die, so maybe I'm just living too fast and can't enjoy the simple things anymore. That said it had its moments where it wasn't completely shit, but pretty shit nonetheless. Might be appealing to the millenium kids and if you start recording maybe you manage to get some 12-16 year old groupies by touring redneck hoods where equality is still a foreign entity. Don't give up on your dream if this is what you're striving for, your actual intelligence can still excel in other areas where it's needed like your blog. Your verse was ass imo, butt seeing how this was what you aimed for maybe it's a compliment? Idk man, take it how you see it. Looking forward to your next drop expecting something different next time.

I actually agree with Lars though, props for diversity, haha.
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Old 07-14-2015, 07:58 AM   #4
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Loled good tongue in cheek drop
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Old 07-14-2015, 04:31 PM   #5
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anyone who thinks this has a deep value or meaning or makes you think of anything other than it fucking sucks is fucking garbage.


Lars, objective, hush. you guys fucka suck.
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Old 07-14-2015, 06:03 PM   #6
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Pretty gosh darn impressive "range", compared to the other kinds of verses you make.
Kept up the quality rhyme&flow, but introduced a "mad-swag"/"over-the-top-language"- type of verse.
your sentence structure is noticeably good (again). pretty "graphic" content though. I mean, I will say anything, but did not expect quite the sexual "details"- even taking into account the title. (It's not a baaad thing to be unexpected though- just probably due to other verses of yours i've seen)
Thus, if you made it an audio, it'd probly not get any "play"in the clubs or any airwaves as a single, but you could bury it on the track-listing somewhere, as a "fun",brief,boastful,coarse,etc "piece" for any of your listeners.

a changeup, so to speak.

on second thought I might have to agree with BB to some extent tho
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I think like 2011 lol. I tried to make it a collab a while back, re-stumbled upon it and figured why not.
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Saw the title an silver an put 2 an 2 together thought for sure I'd head into om for a priceless read

Then I see this fuckin bullshit

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