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Week 13: Magazine
Season 6 Magazine XIII Edition By Asylum Introduction Hey guys we’re back in action lets get this show on the road! We’re diving into an exciting week with lots of great matchups but before we get into that, I’ll be doing last week’s battle reviews and giving credit where credit is due. I want to encourage you all to write your best this week. The playoffs are coming. Everyone give Adonis a round of applause for stepping in the past couple weeks, he’s done a great job. ~Feature Artist: Anderson.paak~ by Adonis Brandon Park Anderson, Better known by Anderson.paak or Breezy Lovejoy is currently under contract with Dr. Dres Aftermath, no coincidence as I hear a heavy Kendrick, but also Chance the Rapper similarities. Born February 8th, 1986 in Oxnard California, which just happens to be a stones throw from house. Not for everyone as it may be too soft or not enough rap or too “choir-ish”, but as a music lover, this dude is something special. I think if he wanted to slay a verse he could easily. I mean, lyrically the dude is good, but his cadence is nuts. If he were to focus on schemes while rapping this guy could be throwing that Randy Johnson complete game type shit. Am I wrong? If you can whether the beginning of his beats and style, you quickly realize this is just good music right here. A very unique and original blend of Hip-Hop, Rap, R&B, Jazz and Soul that all come together to simply create good rhythms and vibes musically. A fresh style in the mix of this over diluted world, I see big things from Mr. Anderson.paak coming soon. Finally, I’m younger then him, WTF am I doing with my life???? haha The Season/Carry me and The Waters - Kendrick influence. VOTW (Verse of the week) Prerogative : Against All Odds Quote:
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Lets see more votes like this people! Keep up the good work @Artifice. Flash Back! http://www.netcees.org/showthread.php?t=76597 This bout between Vulgar and Vividlyvague really stuck out to me. I took it out of a bonus battle in week 15 of AOWL Season 3. Quote:
At first I thought was in another universe, this is a great piece of current event material that’s definitely worth remembering. Vulgar really went all out with this story, it flowed so smoothly it was as if he was imagining it for me. Excellent flow, impeccable rhymes and an unexpected plot twists gave him the edge. Quote:
Vividlyvague came proper with this story, the gritty tale wound to a close rather abruptly but that was a bit of a shocker. Here Vivid created a moment in time true to his name and really came through with a solid verse. In my eyes, it was a little closer than the votes showed but that’s one from the history books everyone! I’d love to see either of these guys sign back in! Both dropped some heat but Vulgar won 4-1. Open Mic Feature #1 http://www.netcees.org/showthread.php?t=123868 I always encourage you guys to go drop some pieces in the open mic! Let’s check out one of the newest pieces over there.. Quote:
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http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pK2-X...vouttE&index=5 ~SEASON SIX WEEK ONE BATTLE REVIEWS~ Last week, Adonis paired some verses together because of some no shows. Those no show wins are still reflected in the records, regardless of the outcome. I’m sure nobody is upset about that move! CHAMPIONSHIP MATCH Artifice vs Razah Artifice wrote a break up piece last week. From the first person, he told the tale of their relationships demise and there were some very strong points, like here.. Quote:
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3PA vs Adonis I’m not sure how I let 3pa get away with saying, “gripping your nads.” Either way, it worked. His verse was a bit vague and hung up in the moment at times but I still really enjoyed it. Very strong writing here, Quote:
I had to let that one slide. I’m not even mad. His ending line was epic as well. I wasn’t ever sure where he went with it but I enjoyed the ride there. Adonis barely edged him out 3-2 by developing a fictional scene for a new Disney series. It was great to see him in his element here, Quote:
Absolutely remarkable storytelling here, that was too good to let slip into the record books without mentioning. His dialogue at the end worked in his favor, immensely. That’s probably what gave him the edge and the V, in my opinion. Adonis is going strong for a playoff run, he wants that champ. Watch out for him this season! I’m sure 3pa will be out for blood this week. Mr. J vs Asylum Mr. J went all in last week, man he must’ve wanted to put me down. Honestly he was all over the place but it worked out really well, the entire piece was excellent. He’s definitely got some twisted rhymes and stories to bring to the table, I really enjoyed this part, Quote:
~Week 13 Predictions~ by Adonis Championship (9-1)(c)ARTIFICE (8-4) FRANK This is very intriguing to me because I think Frank will actually write and try, though he’s been falling down on his word lately and not following through. Artifice is a very talented writer, in all facets in fact, while frank thrives on writing longer winded stories using a simple rhyme pattern which is, using “tion” rhymes through out the entire verse. Frank has the better detailed story telling, but artifice has the better mechanics and skill level. I def think this could go either way, but I do feel like Art will do just enough to edge Frank out even though he writes a classic Frank verse that is uber dope. Artifice 53% Contenders Match (5-5) ADONIS (7-5) MR. J This would be the rubber match if I had beat you at all this season, but each battle has been close. You are 2-0 against me this season and I don’t think this will change. Mr. J 77% (1-0) 3PA (3-5) INNOVATOR Fuck me man, this will be a great read. While Inno has that poetical style that could beat anyone when he’s firing on all cylinders, 3pa surprisingly didn’t show much rust coming off a very long 1-2 year hiatus. He’s not in form, but the talent is evident and present. Inno will need to actually come out swinging and not wait last minute to post up, while threep will need to just not shoot himself in the foot. 3pa has the better polish and word choice, but again, there is something to be said about poetical prowess that can simply out duel anything at any given time. 3pa 66% BOTW (6-4) RAZAH (5-6) ASYLUM I look forward to this battle because asylum is a very talented writer but has gone and lost something like 3-5 in a row or some shit. I’m sure he’s fed up with losing, but the most important thing is when he quick writes and gets moving dude is a low key monster. I think he’ll keep it short, almost overlooking Razah and just writing a verse. I think the ball finally gets rolling and he may have just enough in that tank to edge it out. But Razah losing back to back matches would be a site, I don’t know if that will happen. Razah wrote a hell of a verse last week too, he’s been on a tear, and I don’t see it stopping. Raza51% (7-3)Timeless (1-1) Dr. Dog Interesting battle here, I would actually have this as BOTW if I didn’t think Pat would come out swinging. Split is a dope writer when he shows, showing is rare though. Timeless is nothing less then the most consistent on the site right now. He’ll do his usual shortish verse with heavy rhyme scheme, but he might need more imagery in order to edge out the poetical tones and images and unique turn of phrase that split brings to the table. Split garners votes because he’s polished, and not many people can pull off his style, so it’s appetizing and different. Dr. Dog 55% (5-3) 2Tripple0 (3-4) UnbornBuddha Re-match of week one where 2K put the world on notice and beat the defending champion. Buddha should be rounding the bases now, essentially gearing up for another deep post season run. I think he’ll write a full length verse with polish while 2k will write something quick or late, but write it fast and sloppy. He’s been gone a few weeks and I think he rusts quicker then most. 2K will need to flesh his idea out, which, if we’re honest, he’s just not good at. Meanwhile God will simply have to show and write, not key, but write to a concept that he thinks and executes with a clear goal in mind Buddha 80% BONUS INTERVIEW asylum Mr. J Wudup J, nice win last week bro! That piece was pretty dope. So how confident are you up against Adonis this week? Sup brah. Thanks, I thought I could have done better but it was the first thing that popped into my head when I couldnt get my other piece to work, I was originally going to do a piece called *Frank & Stein* but I never really had the time to develop the story, I think this will be a fun battle, Adonis has been putting in work these past few weeks and shows some drive to take this if he stays focused. What's your go to music to listen to when you write? I've been listening to crazy orchestras and shit it helps. It all depends on the mood Im trying to capture so I just try to rummage through instrumental pieces & so on, Ive been using a lot of classical music as well, Ive listened to Chopin for a couple battles & Vivaldi's Winter is a mainstay, I like Tchaikovsky as well, I stumbled upon this dude...Science Fiction hes got some cool work going for him, sometimes Ill try & get into an emoish vibe but it doesnt work anymore *sigh* but word I just find a nice track & roll with it. Why do you insist on writing your votes in rhyme, damnit? The world wants to know. the 5 Ps bro...proper preparation prevents poor performance. Although I started doing the rhyme feed in the OM a long while back & I forgot who did it on one of my pieces but I was like...nah fuck that...so to prove a point I figured Id keep it up. Also not too many people keep me occupied in the cypher anymore so I might as well write a rhyme somewhere...after all....it is tricky Who's your favorite writer besides yourself signed in right now? I am fond of the work you have put in most recently you have your ups & downs but you still put a decent effort in. Adonis is impressing me as of late due to his blood boiling over recent developments but its nice seeing him put in work, I really enjoy watching Razah work too, he adds enough flavor to leave you searching for more crumbs that are left on the plate...it makes me smile. otherwise Im a fan of everyone because they helped keep the league alive...oh the joy Final Word Alright fellas lets get this party started. I’m going to try and shake the dust off, get into the zone. I’m looking forward to seeing what you all have to show in Week 13 of the greatest topical league on the internet. Good luck. Notes*** PM me to be interviewed for next weeks mag! Last edited by asylum; 06-02-2016 at 07:34 PM. |
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nice work as always sir.
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Nice magazine, thanks for the read. You're doing good work for the people of NC's.
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Two thumbs up, and iif I had another two they would be up as well. Thanks for the inspiration.
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oooo, finally, a mag!
Cool shit man. Read the whole thing, t'was entertaining. Buuttt, what's with this 32 line minimum shit? :( |
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cool mag and I appreciate the featured verse. I think that was maybe my second time. felt good :)
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MY VOTE THAT I COULD NOT POST lol
asylum- I liked the visual you painted here and the way you formulated your descriptions. My only gripes are the use of explosion/exploded together and the "only clothing" thing. That didn't quite sound right. Maybe an adjective in its place that rhymes would have fit better. Those things aside, this was a concise piece with powerful visuals and ended with a finality I was satisfied with, although the last line felt a little rushed in how you worded it. Good job bro. razah- this was a cool piece as well. I liked the flow, and even though the cadence wasn't rigid throughout, it still came off nicely. That marble line was a very nice touch. Good Job. I think both you guys wrote well in your length. You both brought significant ideas in a neat package and had the piece end well. Razah had the neater ending, whereas asylum had better wording throughout, although he had the missteps I mentioned. MVGT asylum for the slightly more enjoyable drop. Thanks guys.
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lol. I only hope to be in the zone this time around.
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lol my bad we just tryna get shit on a schedule here. adonis takes over when i cant and i do the same and vice versa. sorry for your luck, bkut thanks for the effort. yeah i think he edged me out a little bit but tbh i am my own worst critic.
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And all is appreciated :)
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